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Describe a present which you very enjoyed receiving. What it was. Who gave it to you. What the occasion it was. Why you were so pleased.

Describe a present which you very enjoyed receiving. What it was. Who gave it to you. What the occasion it was. Why you were so pleased. k152
Even though there are lots of things that gave me happiness. I'm going to share with you about time when I was given a dog as a present. This dog cheered up my mood over than nine cloud. Those days my parents were considering that it would be the best present, provided that I promise to look after this dog myself. The dog was given me on New Year's Eve, so that it was as a magic time for me. It's often said that dogs are the best friends of human and this is a common fack. The primary reason why it gave me feeling deliriously happy was that I made a new friends who never leave me in the lurch. Nowadays I have been having my dog for a few years however he is my shoulder to cry on as well as the triger to level up, especially when he woke up me as early as it might be to take a stroll which helps me to keep in shape.
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Even though
there are lots of things that gave me happiness. I'm going to share with you about time when I was
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given
a
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dog
as a present. This
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dog
cheered up my mood
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over
than nine cloud. Those days my parents were considering that it would be the best present, provided that I promise to look after this
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dog
myself. The
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dog
was
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given
me on New Year's Eve,
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so
that it was as a magic time for me. It's
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often
said that
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dogs
are the best friends of human and this is a common
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fack
. The primary reason why it gave me feeling
deliriously
happy was that I made a new
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friends
who never
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leave
me in the lurch. Nowadays I have been having my
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dog
for a few years
however
he is my shoulder to cry on
as well
as the
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triger
to level up,
especially
when he woke up me as early as it might be to take a stroll which
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helps
me to
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keep
in shape.

IELTS essay Describe a present which you very enjoyed receiving. What it was. Who gave it to you. What the occasion it was. Why you were so pleased.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
171 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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