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Sme students work while studying. What do you think are the causes of this?what solutions can you suggest?

Money plays a vital role in everyone's life. Some scholars are doing part time jobs along with studies. I will discuss reasons and solutions in upcoming paragraphs. Let us deliberate the compelling reasons, which wil leads towards a reasonable inference. There are myriad of reasons to shore light upon the causes. To plunge into, the most intrinsic one is lack of education facilities in rural areas. To justify, more and more learners go to the other nations or states due to lack of good educational institutions which are not available in their own countries. For instance, nowadays majority of students are migrating to other nations like Canada, Australia and other nations.

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IELTS essay Sme students work while studying. What do you think are the causes of this? what solutions can you suggest?

Essay

American English

2 paragraphs

111 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
Include an introduction and conclusion
Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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