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Smacking is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree disagree? v.3

Smacking is the best form of discipline. v. 3
Discipline can be imparted into children by various methods in which smacking can be one of them. Some parents think that affecting children physically is the best way to bring up children with good discipline. This essay will argue that smacking has not necessarily been the best step to grow up children with a well behaved mannerism. Most of the parents believe that corporal punishment is the only possible means to make their kids acquire disciplined behaviour. This is because they imagine that it can make their children realize and regret for the mistakes done and think not to repeat them thereafter. One such real incident that I encountered a year back was a mother arrogantly ripped off her kid for she was playing with the cooking utensils in mud. Such behaviour makes the parents go wild on their own kids despite of the level of flaw done. Even though, punishing children can be fruitful at times when it is really needed. In situations, say, when children take advantage of the freedom given to them by their parents, there comes a necessity where smacking can eradicate the chances of making the mistake again and help them understand the thin line between the good and the wrong deeds. The Holy book of the Bible has a quote that children won't die if they get beaten up for their misbehaviour whereas parents are saving them from a drastic ending. Therefore smacking can be accepted when it's really needed where it can make children realize the reality amongst their mirage thoughts. This essay argued the flawed understanding of parents on smacking and it's unlikely that physical abuse is the only method to bring up disciplined behaviour in children. In my opinion, smacking can be done to kids only when it's inevitably needed to make them realize the situation and not for any absurd reasons.
Discipline can
be imparted
into
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children
by various methods in which smacking can be one of them.
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Some
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parents
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think
that affecting
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children
physically
is the best way to bring up
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children
with
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good
discipline. This essay will argue that smacking has not
necessarily
been the best step to grow up
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children
with a
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well behaved
mannerism.

Most of the
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parents
believe that corporal punishment is the
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only
possible means to
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make
their
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kids
acquire disciplined
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behaviour
. This is
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because
they imagine that it can
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make
their
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children
realize and regret for the mistakes done and
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think
not to repeat them thereafter. One such real incident that I encountered a year back was a mother
arrogantly
ripped off her
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kid
for she was playing with the cooking utensils in mud. Such
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behaviour
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makes
the
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parents
go wild on their
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own
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kids
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
the level of flaw done.

Even though
, punishing
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children
can be fruitful at times when it is
really
needed. In situations, say, when
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children
take advantage of the freedom
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given
to them by their
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parents
, there
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comes
a necessity where smacking can eradicate the chances of making the mistake again and
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help
them understand the thin line between the
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good
and the
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wrong
deeds. The Holy book of the Bible has a quote that
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children
won't
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die
if they
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get
beaten up for their
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misbehaviour
whereas
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parents
are saving them from a drastic ending.
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Therefore
smacking can be
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accepted
when it's
really
needed where it can
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make
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children
realize the reality amongst their mirage thoughts.

This essay argued the flawed understanding of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
on smacking and it's unlikely that physical abuse is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
method to bring up disciplined
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
in
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children
. In my opinion, smacking can
be done
to
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kids
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
when it's
inevitably
needed to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
them realize the situation and not for any absurd reasons.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Smacking is the best form of discipline. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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