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National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. OVPyj
Assume that you are in an important seminar and you need to find someone who belongs to your country. So, what would be your action to find out? First you go for a look, then clothes and then the extent of speaking. If you are concentrated on examples then noticed the look and clothes are a prime factor for identifying similar nationhood and it is totally indicating culture. Culture is one of the first keys to represent your nation and then other things are affected. I totally agree with the given statement. As per my personal view, every nation has different culture or different ways to represent themselves. If we are taking examples of Indian culture than we noticed every state has a different diversity of culture. Take one practical example, Gujarat. If you are in Delhi which is the capital of India, how could you identify the Gujarati’s people. First you judge by clothes because they follow some tradition of Gujarat. After that you will go to the extent of speaking like they generally do mistake pronunciation of words like “snakes” instead of “snacks”. Here, I am not making a joke of Gujarat’s people but just taking culture because they are more attached with their culture. Second thing, to identify by folk dance of Gujarat which is Garba. These examples show how every country, even every state is following their culture very well. As per current scenario, we may say that some groups of people are moving on from their culture to other cultures due to some reasons. Now take the example of Indian culture of marriage. Indian Marriage follows much tradition. Because traditional look for marriage prefer to wear “Shervani” (for male) and “Saari” (for woman) in India. But tackle of saree is much difficult for long hours and it becomes hectic for women. Same thing can apply for sherwani. Other reasons are attraction of culture, mindset of people, behaviour of people and so on. Due to these reasons, we lose our culture as well as identification. As per I said, we have to remember this thing regarding culture and we need to follow. Otherwise, it will become obsolete with time. Remember these things, every country has a different culture, we should feel proud and follow it.
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seminar and you need to find someone who belongs to your country.
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, what would be your action to find out?
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then noticed the look and clothes are a prime factor for identifying similar nationhood and it is
totally
indicating
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culture
.
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Culture
is one of the
first
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culture
or
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ways to represent themselves.
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If
we are taking
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of Indian
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culture
than we noticed every state has a
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different
diversity of
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culture
. Take one practical
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, Gujarat. If you are in Delhi which is the capital of India, how could you identify the Gujarati’s
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people
.
First
you judge by clothes
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they
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tradition of Gujarat.
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After
that you will go to the extent of speaking like they
generally
do mistake pronunciation of words like “snakes”
instead
of “snacks”. Here, I am not making a joke of Gujarat’s
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people
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because
they are more attached with their
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culture
. Second thing, to identify by folk dance of Gujarat which is
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Garba
. These
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how every country, even every state is following their
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As per
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scenario, we may say that
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some
groups of
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people
are moving on from their
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culture
to other
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cultures
due to
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some
reasons.
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take the
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of Indian
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of marriage. Indian Marriage
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follows
much tradition.
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traditional look for marriage prefer to wear “
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Shervani
” (for male) and “
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Saari
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tackle of saree is much difficult for long hours and it becomes hectic for women. Same thing can apply for
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sherwani
. Other reasons are attraction of
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culture
, mindset of
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people
,
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behaviour
of
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people
and
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on. Due to these reasons, we lose our
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culture
as well
as identification.

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remember this thing regarding
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culture and
we need to
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.
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, it will become obsolete with time. Remember these things, every country has a
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different
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culture
, we should feel proud and
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follow
it.
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IELTS essay National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
379 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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