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Smacking children is best way to discipline

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These days people use corporal punishments to treat children's behaviour. Physical punishment is best way to raise children. This essay will argue that spanking children is completely inacceptable. Parents thinks various ways to discipline a children. Parents are worried as if their children takes a wrong path. They believe that punishment is finest way to discipline. For example, recent study shows that about 21 percent of parents in India smack children for irrelevant behaviour. Therefore these parents believe that smacking children makes children perfect and obedient.
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use
corporal punishments to treat children's
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behaviour
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is best
way to raise
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children
. This essay will argue that spanking
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children
is completely
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inacceptable
.
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Parents
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thinks
various ways to discipline a
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children
.
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Parents
are worried
as if their
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children
takes a
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wrong
path. They believe that punishment is
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finest
way to discipline.
For example
, recent study
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shows
that about 21 percent of
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parents
in India smack
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children
for irrelevant
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behaviour
.
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Therefore
these
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parents
believe that smacking
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children
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makes
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children
perfect and obedient.
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IELTS essay Smacking children is best way to discipline

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
86 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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