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skilled workers moving abroad; reasons and problems v.1

skilled workers moving abroad; reasons and problems v. 1
One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is skilled movement. Some people believe that to improve social lifestyle and for better growth, migration is a good option. On the other hand, others argue that migration damages the economy of the poor nations. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will explain both the reasons and drawbacks for this trend in detail. Firstly, globalization is the main reason why skilled workers tend to relocate from one country to another; however, migration not only benefits the host nation, but also benefits the native nation. In addition, many countries provide dual citizenships and this drags peoples attention to acquire citizenship in abroad for a living. For example, Australian skilled migration enables to have dual citizenship to still attain both the passports to travel between borders with ease. Needless to say, migration has mutual benefits to both home country and foreign country economical growth. Secondly, there are some pitfalls that can overwhelm the potential benefits of migration like escape route for criminals to cross borders after breaking the law. Moreover, skilled migration will leave scrapped talent at home and export new talent to faraway cities. For instance, migration will reduce the quality of skilled labour in the workforce and weaken the financial expansion. Hence, rich countries continue to flourish and poor countries suffer from poverty. In conclusion, to improve social status and enhance professional skills people prefer to leave home country. Finally, the role of skilled migration is too dire to ignore.
One of the most conspicuous trends in
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today
's world is
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skilled
movement.
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Some
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people
believe that to
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improve
social lifestyle and for better growth,
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migration
is a
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good
option.
On the other hand
, others argue that
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migration
damages the economy of the poor nations. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will
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explain
both the reasons and drawbacks for this trend in detail.

Firstly
, globalization is the main reason why
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skilled
workers tend to relocate from one
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country
to another;
however
,
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migration
not
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only
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benefits
the host nation,
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but
also
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benefits
the native nation.
In addition
,
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many
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countries
provide dual
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citizenships
and this drags peoples attention to acquire citizenship in abroad for a living.
For example
, Australian
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skilled
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migration
enables to have dual citizenship to
still
attain both the passports to travel between borders with
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ease
. Needless to say,
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migration
has mutual
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benefits
to both home
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country
and foreign
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country
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economical
growth.

Secondly
, there are
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some
pitfalls that can overwhelm the potential
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benefits
of
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migration
like escape route for criminals to cross borders after breaking the law.
Moreover
,
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skilled
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migration
will
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leave
scrapped talent at home and export new talent to faraway cities.
For instance
,
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migration
will
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reduce
the quality of
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skilled
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labour
in the workforce and weaken the financial expansion.
Hence
, rich
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countries
continue to flourish and poor
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countries
suffer from poverty.

In conclusion
, to
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improve
social status and enhance professional
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skills
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people
prefer to
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leave
home
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country
.
Finally
, the role of
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skilled
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migration
is too dire to
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ignore
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay skilled workers moving abroad; reasons and problems v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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