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Since the turn of the millennium an increasing number of people have switched from reading traditional books to electronic media

Since the turn of the millennium an increasing number of people have switched from reading traditional books to electronic media YLA2N
Nowadays, in many countries, people have turned from reading printed books to online reading materials. This essay will firstly discuss the main reason that why this is happening and secondly, look at the effects this is having on society. Firstly, _ technology has been developed all over the world, so people can access everything instantly, whereas a few decades back people read only paper news and magazines. _ For example, recently one private television channel conducted one survey and reported that older people have less knowledge about the current affairs than the younger generation as they are not very familiar with online resources, thus, their knowledge is limited to old news and incidents. Conversely, the latest generation people can easily answer a wide range of questions about recent world politics, films and technologies _ because of the technology revolution. Secondly, this has created immense awareness in their life and education. Everyone has mobile applications in order to study their subjects _ online with a large number of online classes available to the students which makes it more effective in terms of skill development. For example, _ Sky news television channel reported that people’s _ technical skills have been sharpened because of media communications such as television, radio, and online newspaper which improves their economic growth and employment opportunities _ overseas. ¬¬ In conclusion, younger generations and children are shifting to online media from regular book reading. Governments should make policies and plans to promote the information media and should implement _ lower charges for internet and mobile data in order to provide internet for everyone.
Nowadays, in
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many
countries,
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people
have turned from reading printed books to
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online
reading materials. This essay will
firstly
discuss the main reason that why this is happening and
secondly
, look at the effects this is having on society.

Firstly
, _ technology has
been developed
all over the world,
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so
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people
can access everything
instantly
, whereas a few decades back
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people
read
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only
paper news and magazines. _
For example
, recently one private television channel conducted one survey and reported that older
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people
have less knowledge about the
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current
affairs than the younger generation as they are not
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very
familiar with
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online
resources,
thus
, their knowledge
is limited
to
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old
news and incidents.
Conversely
, the latest generation
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people
can
easily
answer a wide range of questions about recent world politics, films and technologies _
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because
of the technology revolution.

Secondly
, this has created immense awareness in their life and education. Everyone has mobile applications in order to study their subjects _
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online
with
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a large number of
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online
classes available to the students which
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makes
it more effective in terms of
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skill
development.
For example
, _ Sky news television channel reported that
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people’s
_ technical
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skills
have
been sharpened
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because
of media communications such as television, radio, and
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online
newspaper which
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improves
their economic growth and employment opportunities _ overseas.
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In conclusion
, younger generations and children are shifting to
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online
media from regular book reading.
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Governments
should
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make
policies and plans to promote the information media and should implement _ lower charges for internet and mobile data in order to provide internet for everyone.
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IELTS essay Since the turn of the millennium an increasing number of people have switched from reading traditional books to electronic media

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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