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Some people think that women should not work in police worce

Some people think that women should not work in police worce m1MbA
It is true that women are not able to be policewoman. I am totally agree, that women can not work to the police worse because of their nonattention and especially sex. People are known that police is not woman’s profession. In other words, they have to choose another way for their near future and better life. It means that they have to think about their family. They will not continue their life unless they do that. Therefore, the importance thing is that they ought to do something, which helps for their family.
It is true that women are not able to be policewoman. I am
totally
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agree
, that women can not work to the police worse
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because
of their
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nonattention
and
especially
sex.

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People
are known
that police is not woman’s profession.
In other words
, they
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have to
choose another way for their near future and better life. It means that they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about their family. They will not continue their life unless they do that.
Therefore
, the importance thing is that they ought to do something, which
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helps
for their family.

IELTS essay Some people think that women should not work in police worce

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
92 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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