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Since most information about history and culture is found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. Do you agree or disagree?

Since most information about history and culture is found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. NaaW
On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental especially to the younger generation who are more easily affected by it’s addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate. Secondly, dependence on such devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle. For example, recent scientific research by the UK government demonstrated that 90% of people in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends instead of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing sport. As a result, it is conclusively clear that these technology advancements have decreased and diminished our real life interactions.
On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental
especially
to the younger generation who are more
easily
affected
by
it’s addictive nature
and which can result in
people
feeling more isolated from the society.

The central reason behind this is twofold,
firstly
, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have
reduced
crucial face-to-face interactions
dramatically
. Through
use
of these appealing and attractive mediums,
people
feel in touch and connected
yet
lack key social
skills
and the ability to communicate.

Secondly
, dependence on such devices
is built
up
frighteningly
easily
which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle.
For example
, recent scientific research by the UK
government
demonstrated that 90% of
people
in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends
instead
of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing sport.
As a result
, it is
conclusively
clear
that these technology advancements have decreased and diminished our real life interactions.
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IELTS essay Since most information about history and culture is found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore.

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