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Housing is essential for people. Some people argue that the government should offer free housing for peope who cannot afford it. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Housing is essential for people. Some people argue that the government should offer free housing for peope who cannot afford it. v. 3
In most developed and underdeveloped countries, homelessness is a major problem. Some people believe that the government should provide free accommodation for the poor. I do not agree with this opinion and also do not believe this opinion can solve the problem of housing in these countries. In countries where there are different programmes set in motion to ease off the effect of poverty on the people, provision of free shelter for people may not be feasible. For instance, many governments have invested in providing free education and health care to people, providing free housing might be completely impossible. However, if the authorities can make available low cost houses where the masses will only need to pay a small amount of money for, the level of homelessness might be reduced to its barest minimum. Furthermore, if little or taxes can be placed on houses or land for the poor, many people will be able to afford houses, In addition, lands can be made available to the landless to be used to build small apartments they can afford to maintain. Another way of combating the housing problem is to reduce the prices of building materials which will consequently lead to the constructions of houses with little money. Housing loans should also be made available to the people to enable them to build and pay back conveniently In conclusion, i do not think providing free housing to all poor in the city is attainable, but the government could apply other measures as stated to solve the problem of homelessness and help reduce the effect of poverty on the masses.
In most developed and underdeveloped countries, homelessness is a major
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.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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government
should provide
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free
accommodation for the poor. I do not
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agree
with this opinion and
also
do not believe this opinion can solve the
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problem
of housing in these countries.

In countries where there are
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different
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programmes
set in motion to
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ease
off the effect of poverty on the
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people
, provision of
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free
shelter for
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people
may not be feasible.
For instance
,
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many
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governments
have invested in providing
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free
education and health care to
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people
, providing
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free
housing might be completely impossible.

However
, if the authorities can
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make
available low cost
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houses
where the masses will
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only
need to pay a
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small
amount of money for, the level of homelessness might be
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reduced
to its barest minimum.
Furthermore
, if
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little
or taxes can
be placed
on
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houses
or land for the poor,
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many
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people
will be able to afford
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houses
,
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, lands can
be made
available to the landless to be
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used
to build
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small
apartments they can afford to maintain.

Another way of combating the housing
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problem
is to
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reduce
the prices of building materials which will
consequently
lead to the constructions of
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houses
with
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little
money. Housing loans should
also
be made
available to the
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people
to enable them to build and pay back
conveniently


In conclusion
,
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i
do not
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think
providing
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free
housing to all poor in the city is attainable,
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but
the
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government
could apply other measures as stated to solve the
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problem
of homelessness and
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help
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reduce
the effect of poverty on the masses.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Housing is essential for people. Some people argue that the government should offer free housing for peope who cannot afford it. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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