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Sicentific research should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private companies. Do you agree or dissagree? v.2

Sicentific research should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private companies. Do you agree or dissagree? v. 2
Whether the government should take the sole responsibility for scientific research or not has arose a strong controversy among concerning people. While I accept that the state has their own advantages to do research, I disagree that this work should be carried out and controlled only by them. On the one hand, there are some reasons why the government should do and controll sicientific research. Firstly, this guarantees that the research subjects follow the suitable orientation. Indeed, if the thesis was conduct under controlled of authorities, it is likely in line with government purpose. Nontheless, many companies put the priority on finding out the methodologies or liences to increase their productivities instead of protecting the environment, regardless the government’s policies is to strengthen fresh air or water condition. Secondly, giving the chances to profit-organization to do research may put the quality of work in jeopardy. Facts have shown that, it is the pressure of making higher income that drives reserchers to publich their report without careful checks. For example, Trapha – a reputational pharmaceutical corporation, lauched their vacines without sufficient trial tests, resulting in the dead of more than 100 people. On the other hand, I believe that allowing companies to carry out siencetific research is beneficial in some ways. Innitially, the government could save a great deal of budget. By sharing this duty to companies, it creates the state easier accesses to allocate budget to other significant sectors such as Economy or Education. Further and even more significantly, private companies could contribute a huge resources of human and technologies to siencetific research. Undeniably, these days, large corporations with numerous of high-skilled and experienced labours as well as advanced machines, are able to give birth of countless inventions. Let’s take Vingroup – a multiple company - as a telling instance, had it not been for their contribution to the peak of spending a considerable part of their earning on siencetific research, the green in-house cultivating vegatable would have never applied in Vietnam. By the way of conclusion, although the state has their bases to conduct sientific research, it is my perspective that this work should also be shared to private companies
Whether the
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government
should take the sole responsibility for scientific
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research
or not has
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a strong controversy among concerning
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people
. While I accept that the state has their
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own
advantages to do
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research
, I disagree that this work should
be carried
out and controlled
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only
by them.

On the one hand, there are
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some
reasons why the
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government
should do and
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controll
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sicientific
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research
.
Firstly
, this guarantees that the
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research
subjects follow the suitable orientation.
Indeed
, if the thesis was conduct under controlled of authorities, it is likely in line with
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government
purpose.
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Nontheless
,
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many
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companies
put the priority on finding out the methodologies or
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liences
to increase their
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productivities
instead
of protecting the environment, regardless the
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government’s
policies is to strengthen fresh air or water condition.
Secondly
, giving the chances to profit-organization to do
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research
may put the quality of work in jeopardy. Facts have shown that, it is the pressure of making higher income that drives
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reserchers
to
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publich
their report without careful
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checks
.
For example
,
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Trapha
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–
a reputational pharmaceutical corporation,
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lauched
their
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vacines
without sufficient trial
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tests
, resulting in the dead of more than 100
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people
.

On the other hand
, I believe that allowing
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companies
to carry out
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siencetific
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research
is beneficial in
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some
ways.
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Innitially
, the
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government
could save a great deal of budget. By sharing this duty to
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companies
, it creates the state easier accesses to allocate budget to other significant sectors such as Economy or Education.
Further
and even more
significantly
, private
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companies
could contribute a huge
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resources
of human and technologies to
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siencetific
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research
.
Undeniably
, these days, large corporations with numerous of high-skilled and experienced
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labours
as well
as advanced machines, are able to give birth of countless inventions.
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Let
’s take
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Vingroup
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–
a multiple
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company
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-
as a telling instance, had it not been for their contribution to the peak of spending a considerable part of their earning on
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siencetific
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research
, the green in-
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house
cultivating
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vegatable
would have never applied in Vietnam.

By the way of conclusion, although the state has their bases to conduct
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sientific
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research
, it is my perspective that this work should
also
be shared
to private
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companies
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS essay Sicentific research should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private companies. Do you agree or dissagree? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
5.5
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