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Do you agree or disagree, with the following statement? With the helpof technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn more it quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.699

With the helpof technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn more it quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 699
Benefits and drawbacks of technology has been controversial issue in the community lately. Some people claim that technology offer many advancements in the school. moreover, it constitutes a number of undeniable benefits. On the other hand, minor group in the community get criticize regarding technology. Although both sides have several pros and cons, I am of the opinion that technology contributes in many ways to students. I can sort them in the following way which are internet connection, smart classes and multiple learning opportunities. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible detail and examples in the following paragraphs. To begin with, in the modern world technology has undeniable profit for students. They acquire information different part of world in a little time. Internet connection effects educational system in a good way. It gives some opportunity to improvement skills of students. While they sit on home, they connect internet. This provide significant benefits which are time and save money. They do not need to effort for knowledge. It is enough to one click that reach Britannica encyclopedia or sound records from Carl Sagan. They have limitless sources and materials thanks to learn more information on internet. In addition with limitless sources and information, smart class technology opens new era for students. It proposes new advancements in order to teach science fields. When students do experiment, they observe findings and results. They can check findings whether true or wrong. So, It contributes their mental learning skills. Moreover, They have chance to compare other students from different colleges. They can share experiment results in order to compare other students via internet connection. Smart classes allow many opportunities regarding science, with the advent of technology there are multiple learning opportunities. They are constitute with art, music and painting, students can evaluate solid results. As they draw pictures that may compare famous paintings pictures. For instance, Da Vinci or Picasso’s works could be found in many online library. moreover, they may play piano or guitar that not require instruments. Because, some computer programs provide to play online instruments. So, they have more capability to learn information. To summarize the topic, there are many reasons that evaluate technology and learning process. I propose some tangible reasons with the details of example. I believe that these are contribute of vast to students. In the future, this process will be quicker than today for students.
Benefits and drawbacks of
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technology
has been controversial issue in the community lately.
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people
claim that
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technology
offer
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advancements in the school.
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moreover
, it constitutes a number of undeniable benefits.
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, minor group in the community
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get
criticize regarding
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technology
. Although both sides have several pros and cons, I am of the opinion that
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technology
contributes in
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many
ways to
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students
. I can sort them in the following way which are internet connection, smart classes and multiple
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learning
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opportunities
. I will elucidate the
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details
of my support with
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some
tangible detail and examples in the following paragraphs.

To
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with, in the modern world
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technology
has undeniable profit for
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students
. They acquire information
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different
part of world in a
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little
time. Internet connection effects educational system in a
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good
way. It gives
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some
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opportunity
to improvement
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skills
of
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students
. While they sit on home, they connect internet.
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This provide
significant benefits which are time and save money. They do not need to effort for knowledge. It is
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enough
to one click that reach Britannica encyclopedia or sound records from Carl Sagan. They have limitless sources and materials thanks to learn more information on internet.

In addition
with limitless sources and information, smart
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class
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technology
opens new era for
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students
. It proposes new advancements in order to teach science fields. When
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students
do experiment, they observe findings and results. They can
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check
findings whether true or
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wrong
.
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, It contributes their mental
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learning
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skills
.
Moreover
, They have chance to compare other
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students
from
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different
colleges. They can share experiment results in order to compare other
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students
via internet connection.

Smart classes
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allow
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many
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opportunities
regarding science, with the advent of
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technology
there are multiple
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learning
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opportunities
. They are
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with art, music and painting,
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students
can evaluate solid results.
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they draw pictures that may compare
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paintings pictures.
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Vinci or Picasso’s works could
be found
in
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many
online library.
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moreover
, they may play piano or guitar that not require instruments.
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Because
,
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computer programs provide to play online instruments.
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So
, they have more capability to learn information.

To summarize
the topic, there are
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many
reasons that evaluate
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technology
and
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learning
process. I propose
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some
tangible reasons with the
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details
of example. I believe that these are
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contribute
of vast to
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students
. In the future, this process will be quicker than
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today
for
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students
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay With the helpof technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn more it quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 699

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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