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Shoule take care of children at home by gramdparents or go to school by the babysitter. Disscusion both views

Shoule take care of children at home by gramdparents or go to school by the babysitter. Disscusion both views brBpQ

On the one hand, there are a variety advantage of looking after children in nursery school. One of the key benefits is that as offspring is likely to be more independent and strict. Specifically, they are slept on right time, eaten healthy food, and educated well. For example, kids who belong to 2-5 years old, go to kindergatern at 7am as well as come back home at 4pm. However, the babysitter are not able to observe all of students for a long time. As a result, if kids don't obey for these aforementioned rules, it could be difficult to ensure totally the safety of class.

On the one hand, there are a variety advantage of looking after children in nursery school. One of the key benefits is that as offspring is likely to be more independent and strict. Specifically
, they are slept
 on right time, eaten healthy food, and educated well. For example
, kids who belong to 2-5 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
, go to Possible spelling mistake found.kindergarten
kindergatern
 at 7am as well
 as This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 back home at 4pm. However
, the babysitter are not able to observe Consider using "all students" or "all of the students".all studentsall of the students
all of students
 for a long time. As a result
, ifPossible typo: you repeated a whitespace 
kids don't obey for these aforementioned This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
, it could be difficult to ensure totally
 the safety of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
. 