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Should zoos exist or should we ban them?

Should zoos exist or should we ban them? NWrl0
Throughout history, humans have accumulated large and fierce animals to advertise their might and prestige. Zoos have changed a lot in the past 50 years. Zoos remain popular places for people to visit for entertainment and to learn about wild animals. Although some people are of the opinion that zoos can provide a sanctuary for endangered animals. As people become more sensitive to the lives of these animals, they have to understand their habitat. And also give scientists information about the environment and animals' behaviors. First and foremost, zoos help save endangered animals. The argument is that zoos can protect some of these animals that are under threat. The reason is that they are in a safe environment managed by trained staff who can ensure the animals are looked after and can produce offspring. There are examples of successes in this respect, such as with Pandas, which have been endangered for many years but have been protected. The zoo can help people to deepen their knowledge about habitat also behavior. In school, children have the opportunity to learn more about the different behaviors and habitats of many animals such as penguins and raccoons. When they learn about it, children will find it more interesting in the learning process. This helps them have a good study result and have good motivation throughout the learning process Shifting towards the second school of thought, there are still positive impacts within protecting endangered species. Zoos are an artificial environment that has been made by people from wild animals, especially for those who are on the brink of disappearing such as pandas or rhinos. This allows scientists to study animal behavior. Another consideration of zoos is that they employ a large number of people, thus providing job opportunities and income for local residents. Another reason why animals should not be kept in zoos is that they lose their natural instincts. Zoo animals cannot be viewed as wild animals as they are not in their natural habitat therefore they are not acting in their natural state. One of the main people go to zoos is to learn but it has got to the point where the animals are acting nothing like they would in the wild. If students or tourists want to learn about animals they should visit open-range zoos where the animals are free to roam around and act somewhat naturally. Therefore, zoo confinement is psychologically and physically damaging the animals.
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animals
to advertise their might and prestige. Zoos have
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changed
a lot in the past 50 years. Zoos remain popular places for
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people
to visit for entertainment and to
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learn
about wild
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animals
. Although
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some
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people
are of the opinion that zoos can provide a sanctuary for
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endangered
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animals
. As
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people
become more sensitive to the
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lives
of these
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animals
, they
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have to
understand their
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habitat
. And
also
give scientists information about the environment and animals' behaviors.

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and foremost, zoos
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help
save
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endangered
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animals
. The argument is that zoos can protect
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some
of these
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animals
that are under threat. The reason is that they are in a safe environment managed by trained staff who can ensure the
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animals
are looked
after and can produce offspring. There are examples of successes in this respect, such as with Pandas, which have been
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endangered
for
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many
years
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but
have
been protected
.

The zoo can
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help
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people
to deepen their knowledge about
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habitat
also
behavior. In school, children have the opportunity to
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learn
more about the
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different
behaviors and habitats of
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many
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animals
such as penguins and raccoons. When they
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learn
about it, children will find it more interesting in the learning process. This
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helps
them have a
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good
study result and have
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good
motivation throughout the learning
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Shifting towards the second school of
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thought
, there are
still
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positive
impacts within protecting
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endangered
species. Zoos are an artificial environment that has
been made
by
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people
from wild
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animals
,
especially
for those who are on the brink of disappearing such as pandas or rhinos. This
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allows
scientists to study
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animal
behavior. Another consideration of zoos is that they employ
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a large number of
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people
,
thus
providing job opportunities and income for local residents.

Another reason why
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animals
should not be
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kept
in zoos is that they lose their natural instincts. Zoo
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animals
cannot
be viewed
as wild
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animals
as they are not in their natural
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habitat
therefore
they are not acting in their natural state. One of the main
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people
go to zoos is to
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learn
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but
it has
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got
to the point where the
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animals
are acting nothing like they would in the wild. If students or tourists want to
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learn
about
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animals
they should visit open-range zoos where the
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animals
are free to roam around and act somewhat
naturally
.
Therefore
, zoo confinement is
psychologically
and
physically
damaging the
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animals
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IELTS essay Should zoos exist or should we ban them?

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406 words
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