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Should zoos be closing down?

Should zoos be closing down? 8Qogr

Zoos have been great entertainment and education to not children but adults too. For many people, however, for a variety of reasons, zoos are unnecessary in any kind of form. In the following essay, I will be discussing the reasons for this and also I will be solving the difficulties by suggesting some alternatives if the zoos are no longer available to the public. One of the main reasons is that zoos are the captivity of wild animals, which leads to a direct impact on the welfare of the species such as lack of spaces, social stress, presence of visitors, health problems, etc. Therefore expectedly changed the habitation of animals. Another reason is that a majority of zoos profit to satisfy their aspirations instead of renovating the animals’ surroundings giving animals poor living conditions that may affect their status as well as their generations. My opinion is that it is unforgivable to keep animals within cages, imagine visiting the zoos and all you can see is yourself being free around caged animals. So if the zoos are all closed now, we can instead be visiting a national park, where animals are roaming all over the park, which is an enormous forest without any barriers between us and animals. National Parks are forests with the observation of rangers who tend to keep the forest safe and protecting wild animals against any illegal captivity from outsiders. In summary, zoos are safe for the animals or not, it is depending on your perspectives but I do wish zoos to be forever closed so that the animals will not be caged and lived their lives.

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but
 adults too. For This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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people
, however
, for a variety of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlogicreasoningsense
reasons
, zoos are unnecessary in any kind of form. In the following essay, I will be discussing the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlogicreasoningsense
reasons
 for this and also
 I will be solving the difficulties by suggesting This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 alternatives if the zoos are no longer available to the public.

One of the main You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlogicreasoningsense
reasons
 is that zoos are the captivity of wild You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
, which leads to a direct impact on the welfare of the species such as lack of spaces, social This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
, presence of visitors, health problems, etc. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Therefore,
Therefore
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expectedly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
 the habitation of animals.

Another You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlogicreasoningsense
reason
 is that a majority of zoos profit to satisfy their aspirations instead
 of renovating the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals’
 surroundings giving You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 poor living conditions that may affect their status as well
 as their generations. My opinion is that it is unforgivable to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 within cages, imagine visiting the zoos and all you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 is yourself being free around caged animals.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 if the zoos are all closed This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
, we can instead
 be visiting a national park, where You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 are roaming all over the park, which is an enormous forest without any barriers between us and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
. National Parks are forests with the observation of rangers who tend to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 the forest safe and protecting wild You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 against any illegal captivity from outsiders.

In summary, zoos are safe for the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 or not, it The verb 'depending' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is depending
 on your perspectives This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I do wish zoos to be forever closed This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 will not be caged
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resided
lived
 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
. 