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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? 27qo
There are more than 150 nations around this globe with various economic backgrounds. they all are classified into 3 categories namely developed, developing and under developed countries. developed countried are the one that are rich, developing countries are the ones that are self sustainable and under developed are those that are poor. whether or not that the rich countries should share their resources and wealth with other countries that poorer than them is debatable topic. we humans are citizens of this planet earth before being called a citizen of any country. due to various geographical positioning some countries are rich of few resources where other's are not. resources are not the only factors that influence completly the economic condition of a country, other factors such as its political leadership and it's people play a mojor role as well. Iraq and afghanisthan are one of the few countries which are rich in resources such as oil but have a poor leadership which made them prone to a civil war. its very much a responsibilty of rich stable country to help such countries to be stabilized. food and education are one of the basic necessities for every human in today's world. if these basic requirements are not fullfilled the people of these countries will start to wage wars not just internally but on other neighbouring countries which may quickly escalate to a world war. Governments of these poor countries are unstable and lack the resources to take care of their citizens, so wealthy nations must extend their hand in helping them to control the situation and to provide basic needs to its citizens. in conclusion it is my opinion that wealthy countries should do their part in helping these poorer countries become stabilized by providing basic needs to its citizens to prevent mass scale disasters.
There are more than 150 nations around this globe with various economic backgrounds.
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they
all
are classified
into 3 categories
namely
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developed
, developing and under
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developed
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countries
.
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developed
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countried
are the one that are
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rich
, developing
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countries
are the ones that are self sustainable and under
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developed
are those that are poor.
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whether or not
that the
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rich
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countries
should share their resources and wealth with other
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countries
that poorer than them
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is debatable
topic.

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we
humans are
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citizens
of this planet earth
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before
being called
a
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citizen
of any
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country
.
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due
to various geographical positioning
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some
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countries
are
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rich
of few resources where
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other's
are not.
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resources
are not the
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only
factors that influence
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completly
the economic condition of a
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country
, other factors such as its political leadership and it's
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people
play a
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mojor
role
as well
. Iraq and
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afghanisthan
are one of the few
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countries
which are
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rich
in resources such as oil
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but
have a poor leadership which made them prone to a civil war.
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its
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very
much a
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responsibilty
of
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rich
stable
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country
to
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help
such
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countries
to
be stabilized
.

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food
and education are one of the
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basic necessities
for every human in
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today
's world.
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if
these
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basic
requirements are not
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fullfilled
the
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people
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countries
will
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start
to wage wars not
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internally
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but
on other
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neighbouring
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countries
which may
quickly
escalate to a world war.
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Governments
of these poor
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countries
are unstable and lack the resources to take care of their
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citizens
,
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so
wealthy nations
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must
extend their hand in helping them to control the situation and to provide
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basic
needs to its citizens.

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in
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conclusion it
is my opinion that wealthy
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countries
should do their part in helping these poorer
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countries
become stabilized by providing
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basic
needs to its
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citizens
to
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prevent
mass scale disasters.
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IELTS essay Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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