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Should we save land for endangered animals?

Should we save land for endangered animals? 73EJy
In the past, there have been many endangered animals. Now they are extinct. Does it matter? Has our environment been affected by their absence? Has the quality of our own life been changed? The answer to these questions is "Yes. " It does matter if we destroy an endangered species habitat to develop more farmland, housing or industrial parks. There is a delicate balance of nature. If one small part is removed, it will affect all the other parts. For example, if certain trees are cut down, bats will have no place to roost. If they cannot roost, they cannot breed. If there are no bats, there will be no animal, or bird to eat certain insects that plague our crops. Our environment has been affected by the absence of certain animals. Certain flowers are pollinated by butterflies that migrate from Canada to Mexico. Some of the breeding grounds of these butterflies were destroyed. Now these flowers are disappearing from certain areas. We will no longer be able to enjoy their beauty. The quality of our life has been changed. America used to be covered with giant trees. Now we have to visit them in one small park. Rainforests around the world are being cut down to make room for humans. We will never be able to see or study this fragile ecosystem. I would encourage us humans to look for other alternatives for our farmlands, housing, and industries. We have alternatives; the animals do not.
In the past, there have been
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endangered
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animals
.
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Now
they are extinct. Does it matter? Has

our environment been
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affected
by their absence? Has the quality of our
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own
life been
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changed
? The

answer to these questions is
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Yes.
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It does matter if we
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destroy
an endangered species habitat to develop more farmland, housing or

industrial parks. There is a delicate balance of nature. If one
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small
part
is removed
, it will affect all

the other parts.
For example
, if
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certain
trees are
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cut
down, bats will have no place to roost. If they

cannot roost, they cannot breed. If there are no bats, there will be no
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animal
, or bird to eat certain

insects that plague our crops.

Our environment has been
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affected
by the absence of
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certain
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animals
.
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Certain
flowers
are pollinated


by butterflies that migrate from Canada to Mexico.
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Some of the
breeding grounds of these butterflies

were
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destroyed
.
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Now
these flowers are disappearing from
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certain
areas. We will no longer be able to

enjoy their beauty.

The quality of our life has been
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changed
. America
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used
to
be covered
with giant trees.
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Now
we have

to visit them in one
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small
park. Rainforests around the world are being
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cut
down to
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make
room for

humans. We will never be able to
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see
or study this fragile ecosystem.

I would encourage us humans to look for other alternatives for our farmlands, housing, and

industries. We have alternatives; the
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animals
do not.
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IELTS essay Should we save land for endangered animals?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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