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Should teenagers be allowed to have part-time job?

Should teenagers be allowed to have part-time job? aw71X
I think it is a good way to improve the self-esteem of the teenagers. Taking up a part time job can consequently build their confidence. I agree that they study all day which is quite boring for many students and doing a part time job can give them an opportunity to do something interesting. I believe a part time job can’t affect their study. I know that parents worry much about their children, however, it makes students responsible and encourage them to do something for themselves. It will be better if parents show their support and give consent their children to work part time.
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job can give them an opportunity to do something interesting. I believe a
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job can’t affect their study.
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their support and give consent their children to work
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IELTS essay Should teenagers be allowed to have part-time job?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
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