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should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v.7

should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 7
National government has a powerful impact in our lives. The government responsible for education, defense, and even transportation. Every day millions of dollars in tax revenue are invested for transportation. Some people believe that is good idea to spend money to improve high way and roads. Others would disagree. In my view, it is best for government to spend money in transportation for two important reasons. The first reason is health. Cars are a significant source of pollution. They emit poisonous gases that harm not only our health but also our ecosystem. These gases negatively affect environment. Take my friend as an example, many of my friends run to stay health. On of my friend likes to read magazines that related to running and it has a positive effect on the health. Few weeks ago, while he was reading a magazine, he found an article about affect of streets on runner, which was very interesting for him. This article did not focus on car accident and poor driver, instead it explains that runners breathe on accelerated rate which very harmful for them because they will breathe a pollutant that presents on the air, especially in heavy traffic which makes the air saturated in gases. In fact, if the government invest money in transportation, the cars would decrease in the street, and it is really beneficial to the society. As clearly you can see, the governments should spend currency to encourage people to use transportation rather that cars. The second is convenience. Most public transportation dose not maintain well and they are not up to date, so most of people don' t use it especially the buses which are very classic and old to ride them. For stance, when I was in high school, I took summer classed in a school which is far from my house 15 mils, long distance to walk, so I have to take bus. In the morning, the bus come on time but in the afternoon, the bus would late and it is overcrowded. So, I disappointed about that and hurt me a lot. In addition, It is dirty, not comfortable, and contains many graffiti. As a result, I bought a car to solve this problem. If the bus were comfortable, I wouldn' t buy a car, and I would study in the bus. This experience taught me that transportation should be convenient to ride it. In sum, governments should protects our health because the health is wealth and enhance use of public transportation. Also, it should takes care of the transportation and renew it so the people will be happy when ride it. So, all government as well as people should pay attention to transportation
National
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government
has a powerful impact in our
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lives
. The
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government
responsible for education, defense, and even
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transportation
. Every day millions of dollars in tax revenue
are invested
for
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transportation
.
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Some
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people
believe
that is
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good
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idea
to spend money to
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improve
high way and roads. Others would disagree. In my view, it is best for
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government
to spend money in
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transportation
for two
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important
reasons.

The
first
reason is
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health
.
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Cars
are a significant source of pollution. They emit poisonous gases that harm not
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only
our
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health
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but
also
our ecosystem. These gases
negatively
affect environment. Take my friend as an example,
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many
of my friends run to stay
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health
. On of my friend likes to read magazines that related to running and it has a
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positive
effect on the
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health
. Few weeks ago, while he was reading a magazine, he found an article about affect of streets on runner, which was
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very
interesting for him. This article did not focus on
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car
accident and poor driver,
instead
it
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explains
that runners breathe on accelerated rate which
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very
harmful for them
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because
they will breathe a pollutant that presents on the air,
especially
in heavy traffic which
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makes
the air saturated in gases. In fact, if the
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government
invest money in
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transportation
, the
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cars
would decrease in the street, and it is
really
beneficial to the society. As
clearly
you can
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see
, the
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governments
should spend currency to encourage
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people
to
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use
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transportation
rather
that cars.

The second is convenience. Most public
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transportation
dose not maintain
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well and
they are not up to date,
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so
most of
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people
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don&
#039; t
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use
it
especially
the buses which are
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very
classic and
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old
to ride them. For stance, when I was in high school, I took summer classed in a school which is far from my
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house
15 mils, long distance to walk,
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so
I
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have to
take bus. In the morning, the bus
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come
on time
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but
in the afternoon, the bus would late and it
is overcrowded
.
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So
, I disappointed about that and hurt me a lot.
In addition
, It is dirty, not comfortable, and contains
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many
graffiti.
As a result
, I
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bought
a
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car
to solve this problem. If the bus were comfortable, I
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wouldn&
#039; t
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buy
a
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car
, and I would study in the bus. This experience taught me that
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transportation
should be convenient to ride it.

In sum,
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governments
should
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protects
our
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health
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because
the
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health
is wealth and enhance
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use
of public
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transportation
.
Also
, it should
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takes
care of the
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transportation
and renew it
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so
the
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people
will be happy when ride it.
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So
, all
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government
as well
as
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people
should pay attention to
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transportation
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
449 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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