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Convinience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Convinience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. with this opinion? v. 2
It is undeniable that the increasing availability of convenience foods has been a significant features of modern life in many developed countries. Some people believe that with advances in food technology, traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation will disappear. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this idea. It is true that today many people do not ve enough time to cook and that convenience fods are an attractive option. Besides, these foods have improves significant in terms of quality and availability and the range of sale in the average supermarket is quite impressive. It is easily to ready-prepared microwavable. So, people chose available foods instead of traditional foods to saving of time and doing other activities. However, the growing popularity of television cookery programmes and cook suggest that people should be continue to value traditional ways of preparing foods. Many farmers markets selling fresh and locally-produced food continue to be in many parts of the world. In addition, cooking is really basic, natural ingredients are cheaper than buying processed foods. Moreover, traditional foods are an important in terms of culture and social life. For example, after a working day, the iusually like to their wife cooking foods for them than eating available foods or going to a restaurant. In addition, many important celebrations such as weddings, Christmas or New Year are prepared by traditional foods. In conclusion, convenience foods can replace traditional foods are completely unlikely to happen. It is hard to imagine a world in which people do not continue to enjoy traditional, home-cooked meals at least some of the time.
It is undeniable that the increasing availability of convenience
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foods
has been a significant
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features
of modern life in
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many
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developed countries
.
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Some
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people
believe that with advances in
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food
technology,
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traditional
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foods
and
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traditional
methods of
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food
preparation will disappear. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this
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idea
.

It is true that
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today
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many
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people
do not ve
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enough
time to cook and that convenience
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fods
are an attractive option.
Besides
, these
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foods
have
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improves
significant in terms of quality and availability and the range of sale in the average supermarket is quite impressive. It is
easily
to ready-prepared microwavable.
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So
,
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people
chose available
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foods
instead
of
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traditional
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foods
to saving of time and doing other activities.

However
, the growing popularity of television cookery
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programmes
and cook suggest that
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people
should be
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continue
to value
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traditional
ways of preparing
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foods
.
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Many
farmers
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markets
selling fresh and
locally
-produced
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food
continue to be in
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many
parts of the world.
In addition
, cooking is
really
basic, natural ingredients are cheaper than buying processed
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foods
.
Moreover
,
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traditional
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foods
are an
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important
in terms of culture and social life.
For example
, after a working day, the
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iusually
like to their wife cooking
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foods
for them than eating available
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foods
or going to a restaurant.
In addition
,
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many
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important
celebrations such as weddings, Christmas or New Year
are prepared
by
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traditional
foods.

In conclusion
, convenience
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foods
can replace
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traditional
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foods
are completely unlikely to happen. It is
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hard
to imagine a world in which
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people
do not continue to enjoy
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traditional
, home-cooked meals at least
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some of the
time.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Convinience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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