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should gay marriage is legal

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It is true to say that a marriage between male and male has always been a debatable topic across the global map for centuries. There is a fair number of individuals who view same-sex marriage as a natural event whereas some people assume that it poses a pernicious ramification to society as a whole. Before heading to the final conclusion, I would rather dig in these two sides in depth. To initiate, those who find gay marriage contentious that could be because it is against the religious belief. Despite the fact that male and male relationships are harmless, a paramount concern emerges. There are rarely number of successful fertility in gay marriages since men are not biologically constructed to give births. In consequence, it causes a high rate of sterile offspring which peaks unsuccessful reproduction of the young generation. In a long term impact, an integral tendency of gay relationships raising with a strong demand of having kids, the more likely fertile babies are not produced. In another word, it puts the humans' survivals on the brisk of death. On the other hand, gay people may have different mind-sets to general males and females, there is no exception to a fundamental fundamental urge for love. Everyone has a right to own individual liberty that involves gay gender. Emotions run life, seeking bliss is an efficient way to achieve an essence of sense of satisfaction that draws them to be better version of themselves in terms of humanity. The lack of love is detrimental to a spirit as it leaves people to depression, anxiety and anger, in consequence, people keep a negative outlook towards life. The worst situation can occur: committing suicides. To conclude, the perk from a same-sex married outweighs the drawback. Personally, children are not a key factor to retain a delightful relationship; therefore, people should do what make them to be happy because no one dies from lack of sex, love is what we die from. Gay marriage is the best option to allow males live life the fullest, hence there is no doubt that gay marriage should be legal.
It is true to say that a
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marriage
between male and male has always been a debatable topic across the global map for centuries. There is a
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fair
number of individuals who view same-sex
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marriage
as a natural
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event
whereas
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some
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people
assume that it poses a pernicious ramification to society as a whole.
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Before
heading to the final conclusion, I would
rather
dig in these two sides in depth.

To initiate, those who find gay
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contentious that could be
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because
it is against the religious belief. Despite the fact that male and male relationships are harmless, a paramount concern emerges. There are rarely number of successful fertility in gay
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marriages
since
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men
are not
biologically
constructed to give births. In consequence, it causes a high rate of sterile offspring which peaks unsuccessful reproduction of the young generation. In a long term impact, an integral tendency of gay relationships raising with a strong demand of having kids, the more likely fertile babies are not produced.
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another word, it puts the humans' survivals on
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death.

On the other hand
, gay
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people
may have
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different
mind-sets to general
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males
and females, there is no exception to a
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fundamental fundamental
urge for
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love
. Everyone has a right to
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own
individual liberty that involves gay gender. Emotions run life, seeking bliss is an efficient way to achieve an essence of sense of satisfaction that draws them to be better version of themselves in terms of humanity. The lack of
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love
is detrimental to a spirit as it
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leaves
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people
to depression, anxiety and anger, in consequence,
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people
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keep
a
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negative
outlook towards life. The worst situation can occur: committing suicides.

To conclude
, the perk from a same-sex married outweighs the drawback.
Personally
, children are not a key factor to retain a delightful relationship;
therefore
,
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people
should do what
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make
them to be happy
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because
no one
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dies
from lack of sex,
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love
is what we
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die
from. Gay
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marriage
is the best option to
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allow
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males
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live
life the fullest,
hence
there is no doubt that gay
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marriage
should be legal.
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IELTS essay should gay marriage is legal

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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