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Should children go to nursery school prior to their primary studies? Share personal examples in your essay, if appliable.

Should children go to nursery school prior to their primary studies? Share personal examples in your essay, if appliable. kYWO2
These days, parents are highly influenced by educating their children from very begining of life. They are even forcing their loved ones to join prior study before they have started learning to walk. I disagree with this method of study. There are several crusial reasons why younger age child should not be enrolled into the nursery school. Firstly, from the involvement of parent’s and family environment in the early age of life a child learns how to behave with society members which can not be taught by teachers at the school. From example, my nephew is not behaving good enough with other relative members as she was not taught how to behave with other members of family. Secondly, separating from parents and involvment with different group in the school can directly affect child’s brain. At early age, kids are so much attached with their parents and spending long time without them in this days can bring child into depression and can not perform good in further study. For instance, it has been proved in a Canadian research that major part of younger childrens are feeling lack of interest in study who has joined prior study before the primary school. Finally, in the very younger age, child requires more feeding from his own mother instead of market food. Unavailabilty for long time of the day due to the nursery long working hours may cause physical deficiency issue to the children. To defend against different health issues, mother milk is so much important to the child in early life which has been scientifically proved. In conclusion, instead of sending loved ones to early study it is recommanded that parents should look after their own children and teach them inhouse for better prospect of child interms of emotions, health and behave.
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begining
of life. They are even forcing their
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loved
ones to
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join
prior
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study
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before
they have
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started
learning to walk. I disagree with this method of study.

There are several
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crusial
reasons why younger
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age
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child
should not
be enrolled
into the nursery school.
Firstly
, from the involvement of
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parent’s
and family environment in the
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early
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age
of life a
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child
learns how to behave with society members which can not
be taught
by teachers at the school. From example, my nephew is not behaving
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good
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enough
with other relative members as she was not taught how to behave with other members of family.

Secondly
, separating from
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parents
and
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involvment
with
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different
group in the school can
directly
affect
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child’s
brain. At
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early
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age
, kids are
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so
much attached with their
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parents
and spending long time without them in
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this days
can bring
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child
into depression and can not perform
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good
in
further
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study
.
For instance
, it has
been proved
in a Canadian research that major part of younger
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childrens
are feeling lack of interest in
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study
who has
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joined
prior
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study
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before
the primary school.

Finally
, in the
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very
younger
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age
,
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child
requires more feeding from his
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own
mother
instead
of market food.
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Unavailabilty
for long time of the day due to the nursery long working hours may cause physical deficiency issue to the
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children
. To defend against
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different
health issues, mother milk is
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so
much
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important
to the
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child
in
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early
life which has been
scientifically
proved.

In conclusion
,
instead
of sending
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loved
ones to
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early
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study
it is
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recommanded
that
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parents
should look after their
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own
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children
and teach them
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inhouse
for better prospect of
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child
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interms
of emotions, health and behave.
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IELTS essay Should children go to nursery school prior to their primary studies? Share personal examples in your essay, if appliable.

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298 words
6.0
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