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Short on Intimacy Sexual life

Short on Intimacy Sexual life JLBm5
Ana and James have been married for three years. Ana had a disease and her problem only be cured by having sex every night but her husband (James) also had a disease, he could not have sex during the night other words he had no sexual power at night, although she worked during the day, and she could not have sex with James during the day, consequently, what did she do to solve her problem? First, she thought it may seem strange due to she wanted more frequently than her husband, and as far as James was concerned everything was fine on the contrary she was not satisfied, and she decided to turn to Abby for how could she solve this problem. Anna thought there was something wrong with her body but she could not believe that because she worked with the public and she got frequent remarks that she was a beautiful woman, she was at a total loss and frustrated, she wanted more intimacy from James and she did not know how to get more intimacy from her husband she wrote numerous letters and expressed to James and she hoped to reach him after while she found what she did do, she must get a night job if she gets a job at night she will solve her problem because she can have sex with James during the day, James can have sex during the day but he could not have sex during the night
Ana and James have
been married
for three years. Ana had a disease and her problem
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only
be cured
by having
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sex
every
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night
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but
her husband (James)
also
had a disease, he could not have
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sex
during the
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night
other words he had no sexual power at
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night
, although she worked during the day, and she could not have
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sex
with James during the day,
consequently
, what did she do to solve her problem?

First
, she
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thought
it may seem strange due to she wanted more
frequently
than her husband, and as far as James
was concerned
everything was fine
on the contrary
she was not satisfied, and she decided to turn to Abby for how could she solve this problem.

Anna
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thought
there was something
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wrong
with her body
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but
she could not believe that
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because
she worked with the
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public and
she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
frequent remarks that she was a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
woman, she was at a total loss and frustrated, she wanted more intimacy from
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James and
she did not know how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more intimacy from her husband she wrote numerous letters and expressed to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
James and
she hoped to reach him after while she found what she did do, she
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must
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get
a
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night
job if she
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gets
a job at
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night
she will solve her problem
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because
she can have
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sex
with James during the day, James can have
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sex
during the day
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but
he could not have
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sex
during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
night
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IELTS essay Short on Intimacy Sexual life

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
246 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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