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Many parents choose to think their children at home rather than sending their children to school . do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh the drawbacks

Many parents choose to think their children at home rather than sending their children to school. do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh the drawbacks dqyyP
In the epoch, education is vital role in children life, however, many guardians give preference to teach their children at homes rather than choosing education centre for them. according to me demerits outrace of merits, because everyone needs educational environment which parents cannot provide it. i will explain it in upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, one predominate reason for teaching children at their home that is children strengthen their relations with family members. To explicate, if anyone thought by parents at their homes then they can spend their more time with knowperson rather than spending time in schools. Secondly, who child teaches in homeshool. they will more selfdepended in their upcoming life rather than those students who take classes in schools. On the other hand, there is prominent factors which agree with taught should be in schools. Chiefly, homeshool would be negative effect on students manners such as, discipline, how can treat with others and how they can give respect to elders. without these manners anyone will not success in future. In addition, some parents are not well educated they do not able to give proper education to their children. Apart from this, parents never make educational environment ( like schools ) in home. Finally, if students attend classes at their home then they cannot participate during the compition ( which are inaugurated by traniers at education center ) and learner cannot judge theirselves. In an conclusion, parents and schools are play equal role in child, s life, however, education centers are more necessary for everyone life.
In the epoch,
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education
is vital role in
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children
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life
,
however
,
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many
guardians give preference to teach their
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children
at
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homes
rather
than choosing
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education
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centre
for them.
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according to me
demerits outrace of merits,
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because
everyone needs educational environment which
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parents
cannot provide it.
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i
will
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explain
it in upcoming paragraphs. To
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begin
with, one predominate reason for teaching
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children
at their home
that is
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children
strengthen their relations with family members. To explicate, if anyone
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thought
by
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parents
at their
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homes
then they can spend their more time with
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knowperson
rather
than spending time in
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schools
.
Secondly
,
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who child
teaches in
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homeshool
.
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they
will more
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selfdepended
in their upcoming
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life
rather
than those students who take classes in
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schools
.
On the other hand
,
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there is prominent factors
which
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agree
with taught should be in
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schools
.
Chiefly
,
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homeshool
would be
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negative
effect on students manners such as, discipline, how can treat with others and how they can give respect to elders.
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without
these manners anyone
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will not success
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in future
.
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,
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some
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parents
are not
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well educated
they do not able to give proper
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education
to their
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children
. Apart from this,
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parents
never
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make
educational environment
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(
like
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schools
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)
in home.
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, if students attend classes at their home then they cannot participate during the
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compition
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(
which
are inaugurated
by
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traniers
at
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education
center
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)
and learner cannot judge
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theirselves
. In
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an
conclusion,
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parents
and
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schools
are play equal role in child, s
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life
,
however
,
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education
centers are more necessary for everyone
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life
.
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IELTS essay Many parents choose to think their children at home rather than sending their children to school. do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh the drawbacks

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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