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Shops open 24 hours advantages and disadvantages .

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Olden days shops used to close by night 10pm or 11pm, where as nowadays, shops are open for long hours. It is beneficial for customers, companies as well as for shopkeepers. People who work odd hours can get the food by late nights after their work over. Although, People who need essential items for emergency purpose can go in the shop to buy it. The people who have leisure time can visit the shop to have a look at the products and compare the price with other shops. On other hand, company needs to hire more staff to work late nights. It has to pay for an electricity bill, pay employees if they work over time or late night. Also their is an advantage for the company financially as this may attract more customers to buy any item when other shops are closed. Therefore, in my opinion, it is highly advantageous for the company, employees and the customers to keep the shop open for long hours.
Olden days
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shops
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used
to close by
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night
10pm or 11pm,
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where as
nowadays,
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shops
are open for long hours. It is beneficial for customers,
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companies
as well
as for shopkeepers.

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People
who
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work
odd hours can
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get
the food by late
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nights
after their
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work
over. Although,
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People
who need essential items for emergency purpose can go in the
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shop
to
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buy
it. The
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people
who have leisure time can visit the
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shop
to have a look at the products and compare the price with other shops.

On other hand,
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company
needs to hire more staff to
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work
late
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nights
. It
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has to
pay for an electricity bill, pay employees if they
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work
over time or late
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night
.
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Also
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their
is an advantage for the
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company
financially
as this may attract more customers to
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buy
any item when other
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shops
are closed
.

Therefore
, in my opinion, it is
highly
advantageous for the
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company
, employees and the customers to
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keep
the
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shop
open for long hours.

IELTS essay Shops open 24 hours advantages and disadvantages.

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