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Shopping is the leasure time activity for young and adults. Why it’s happening?

Shopping is the leasure time activity for young and adults. Why it’s happening? 8Jepm
Shopping is a word that gives a big smile on any individual face weather that is for others or for own. It gives emple views on purchasing which can discuss in my forecoming essay. Youngsters spend most of their free time on shopping either by shopping malls or by online. It generally fresh up mind as well it is stress buster. Being a jugglers in life many individuals like to spend time to fulfill necessary things as well change mood from regular schedule. However, it is all in all positive development the light of fact is directly generates revenue to the government. If people buying things either through shops or online sone part of amount payable as tax to the government which directly generates income to nation and it helps in development of the country. Although, it improves the economy of nation.
Shopping is a word that gives a
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big
smile on any individual face weather
that is
for others or for
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own
. It gives
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emple
views on purchasing which can discuss in my
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forecoming
essay. Youngsters spend most of their free time on shopping either by shopping malls or by online.
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It
generally
fresh up mind
as well
it is
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stress
buster. Being
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a jugglers
in life
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many
individuals like to spend time to fulfill necessary things
as well
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change
mood from regular schedule.
However
, it is all in all
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positive
development the light of fact is
directly
generates revenue to the
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government
. If
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people
buying things either through shops or online
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sone
part of amount payable as tax to the
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government
which
directly
generates income to nation and it
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helps
in development of the country.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
the economy of nation.

IELTS essay Shopping is the leasure time activity for young and adults. Why it’s happening?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
142 words
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