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Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects.

Shopping is becoming more and more popular as a leisure activity. However, some people feel that this has both positive and negative effects. gbLN3

nowadays people love to have luxury lifestyle. As income is increasing purchasing capacity is also growing. During a leisure time some people invest their money in shopping and they purchase clothes, shops and so on. I will discuss both positive and negative effects of shopping in subsequent paragraph. Despite having a previous stuff in a good condition some people buy new stuff, purchasing habit becomes a matter dignity for them. They are always excited to share picture of their clothes, watch on social media and they gained follower by doing this. In addition to this, a section of society do shopping for looking rich whenever they attend any function or party their main priority is to look adonish and rich. They do not want to repeat same clothes again that is why they are always keen to have new products. New clothes always provide fresh and energetic vibes. When buyers start purchasing new stuff they do not care for money and that time they are tend to have it. They waste a huge amount of money on materialistic life and they also influenced other to do more shopping by showing expensive things. Children get more influenced by Seeing that high-priced product and they start demanding to their parents but in most of the cases these things are not affordable by middle class family. In addition to this doing extra shopping create a pollution on earth and the waste of clothes goes to land fill. If clothes are burnt then it's smoke would affect in air. In conclusion, although, there are numerous reasons to support shopping, I feel that if purchasing is done frequently and products comes at affordable price then it is good for everyone.

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people
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love
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purchase
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clothes
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 in subsequent paragraph.

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some
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people
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buy
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clothes
 always provide fresh and energetic vibes.

When buyers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 purchasing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlatedifferentstate-of-the-artmodernunusualunfamiliar
new
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tend
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life and
 they also
 influenced other to do more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 by showing expensive things. Children This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 more influenced by Seeing that high-priced Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).product, and
product and
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start
 demanding to their parents This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in most of the cases these things are not affordable by middle This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
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 to this doing extra You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
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a pollution
 on earth and the waste of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwardrobegarbregaliaattiresportswear
clothes
 goes to land fill. If You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwardrobegarbregaliaattiresportswear
clothes
are burnt
 then it's smoke would affect in air.

In conclusion
, although, there are numerous reasons to support You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
, I feel that if purchasing is done
frequently
 and products This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 at affordable price then it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 for everyone. 