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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.16

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 16
It is irrefutable that languages are considered as the foundation stone to many civilisations. In the contemporary world, many languages are on the verge of getting lost. There are many people who believe that more amount should be invested to save these languages, while I believe that investing in something like this will be a loss. In this essay, I will present my views with examples. The most significant problem of the regional language is its use. Local languages are rarely used in day to day life. For instance, nowadays communication is mostly done on a global language, talking in a regional language is not considered professional. It is because most of the business partners and clients prefer a language they would understand. As a result, if the government invests a great amount in something like this it will be a loss for them. On the other hand, the regional languages can not be removed from the school's curriculum. In some places the local languages help individual's to communicate in a better way. For example, in India alone, there are more than 30 local languages. It is because of the warmth people get, when a person speaks in their language. It is believed that people having same mother tongue indulge to each other in a better way. The government should consider making local languages compulsory up to secondary school. As a result, they won't have to invest a huge amount and local languages won't lose their existence. In conclusion, Despite several languages having great significance in certain communities. In my opinion, government should only make these languages compulsory to certain class and should not get involved in investing huge amount in it.
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languages
are considered
as the foundation stone to
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civilisations
. In the contemporary world,
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many
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languages
are on the verge of getting lost. There are
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many
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people
who believe that more
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amount
should
be invested
to save these
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languages
, while I believe that investing in something like this will be a loss. In this essay, I will present my views with examples.

The most significant problem of the regional
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language
is its
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use
.
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Local
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languages
are rarely
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used
in day to day life.
For instance
, nowadays communication is
mostly
done on a global
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language
, talking in a regional
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language
is not considered professional. It is
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because
most of the business partners and clients prefer a
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language
they would understand.
As a result
, if the
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government
invests a great
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amount
in something like this it will be a loss for them.

On the other hand
, the regional
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languages
can not
be removed
from the school's curriculum. In
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some
places the
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local
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languages
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help
individual's to communicate in a better way.
For example
, in India alone, there are more than 30
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local
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languages
. It is
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because
of the warmth
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people
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get
, when a person speaks in their
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language
. It
is believed
that
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people
having same mother tongue indulge to each other in a better way. The
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government
should consider making
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local
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languages
compulsory up to secondary school.
As a result
, they won't
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have to
invest a huge
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amount
and
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local
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languages
won't lose their existence.

In conclusion
, Despite several
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languages
having great significance in certain communities. In my opinion,
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government
should
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only
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make
these
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languages
compulsory to certain
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class
and should not
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get
involved in investing huge
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amount
in it.
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IELTS essay Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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