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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.13

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 13
Many languages become extinct due to the increase in Globalization. Some people think that the government should take action to preserve these languages, while others opine that these languages are of less value and any money spent will be a waste of resources. In my opinion, as long as people can communicate with each other in any language, we are ok and the governments don't have to worry about saving every single dialect Protecting minority languages has its advantages. For instance, there might be several writings like the culture of a community. How they lived, what they eat, etc. It might even have some valuable books on topics like medicine, astronomy, philosophy. If we are to find these books or writings in the future and if no one can translate it, it will be a major loss to humankind. All that valuable data will be lost forever. Languages might even give us an idea about the origin of a race or religion. For example, a language called Tamil is spoken in the southern part of India. It's been recently discovered that some tribes in Africa speak a very similar language. It's astonishing to think about how the tribal people in Africa are linked to the southern part of India. Did they migrate centuries ago? All these knowledge will be gone if the languages are not preserved. On the contrary, language is just a means to communicate between people. Ever since the advent of the Internet, people tend to use a common language like English, so that information is shared across different parts of the world. In fact, English has become one of the official languages in every country. All inventions, discoveries and the other plethora of material are shared and stored across the world through common languages like English. With the increase in globalization, people want to learn the common dialect So that they can invest and be successful in their business all over the earth. On top that, having a single language reduces the burden on the governments to be translated into different languages for international business. In conclusion, though protecting minority languages from extinction have its advantages, of preserving the history and culture, in the modern world, with the advancement in Information technology, all the information is already documented clearly and readily available in the common language like English through the Internet. So it's a waste of money and resources to protect these languages
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become extinct due to the increase in Globalization.
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people
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think
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government
should take action to preserve these
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languages
, while others opine that these
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languages
are of less value and any money spent will be a waste of resources. In my opinion, as long as
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people
can communicate with each other in any
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language
, we are ok and the
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governments
don't
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have to
worry about saving every single
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dialect


Protecting minority
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languages
has its advantages.
For instance
, there might be several writings like the culture of a community. How they
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lived
, what they eat, etc. It might even have
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some
valuable books on topics like medicine, astronomy, philosophy. If we are to find these books or writings in the future and if no one can translate it, it will be a major loss to humankind. All that valuable data will
be lost
forever.
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Languages
might even give us an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
about the origin of a race or religion.
For example
, a
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language
called Tamil
is spoken
in the southern part of India. It's been recently discovered that
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some
tribes in Africa speak a
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very
similar
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language
. It's astonishing to
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think
about how the tribal
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people
in Africa
are linked
to the southern part of India. Did they migrate centuries ago? All
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these knowledge
will
be gone
if the
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languages
are not preserved.

On the contrary
,
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language
is
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just
a means to communicate between
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people
. Ever since the advent of the Internet,
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people
tend to
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use
a
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common
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language
like English,
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so
that information
is shared
across
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different
parts of the world. In fact, English has become one of the official
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languages
in every country. All inventions, discoveries and the other plethora of material
are shared
and stored across the world through
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common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
like English. With the increase in globalization,
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people
want to learn the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
common
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dialect


This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that they can invest and be successful in their business all over the earth. On top that, having a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
the burden on the
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governments
to
be translated
into
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different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
for international business.

In conclusion
, though protecting minority
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
from extinction have its advantages, of preserving the history and culture, in the modern world, with the advancement in Information technology, all the information is already documented
clearly
and
readily
available in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
like English through the Internet.
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So
it's a waste of money and resources to protect these
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languages
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
405 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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