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Several languages are at risk of extinction. Some people think that government should spend money to save them , some consider that it would be the wastage of money .Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Several languages are at risk of extinction. Some people think that government should spend money to save them, some consider that it would be the wastage of money. rYad2
In this current era, people mainly prefer to speak the languages which are understandable by all other countries. But in the race of adapting more popular language, several languages are at risk of extinction. Few suggest that our leaders should spend the money to save them. On the other hand some say it would be of no use rather than wastage of money. In coming paragraphs I would like to discuss on both sides and give my opinions on it. First and foremost, If I think according to the new generation version of life, it must be necessary to save the local languages or the ones which are at higher risk of end. Some languages which are only speak within one state of the country are at more in danger. Government should think about the solution for it so that it will save. The committee or the leaders should spend the expenditures on various projects which would help to expand the popularity of particular languages. However, some minds are think opposed to the above mentioned ideas. They are believing that it would be wastage of money if the new projects which could save the languages at risk will not working properly or will not followed by the population. As we know every initiative come true or successful only by the population adaptation. In the conclusion, I would like to give my opinion that anyhow, the local languages must be saved by the government through various steps or by spending money on them. This way we save our historical languages or our up coming generation would be able to learn their own languages.
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which are understandable by all other countries.
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, several
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are at
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risk
of extinction. Few suggest that our leaders should spend the
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money
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them.
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say it would be of no
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rather
than wastage of
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money
. In coming paragraphs I would like to discuss on both sides and give my opinions on it.

First
and foremost, If I
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think
according to the new generation version of life, it
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be necessary to
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save
the local
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languages
or the ones which are at higher
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risk
of
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end
.
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which are
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only
speak within one state of the country are at more in
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.
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should
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about the solution for it
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save
. The committee or the leaders should spend the expenditures on various projects which would
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help
to expand the popularity of particular languages.

However
,
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minds are
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think
opposed to the above mentioned
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ideas
. They
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are believing
that it would be wastage of
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money
if the new projects which could
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save
the
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at
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will not
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working
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or will not
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followed
by the population. As we know every initiative
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come
true or successful
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only
by the population adaptation.

In the conclusion, I would like to give my opinion that anyhow, the local
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languages
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must
be saved
by the
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government
through various steps or by spending
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money
on them. This way we
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save
our historical
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languages
or our up coming generation would be able to learn their
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own
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languages
.
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IELTS essay Several languages are at risk of extinction. Some people think that government should spend money to save them, some consider that it would be the wastage of money.

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