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Many parents believe that children should play team sports like football, basketball and so on, instead of individual sports such as swimming or running, during the school scheduled timetable. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

Many parents believe that children should play team sports like football, basketball and so on, instead of individual sports such as swimming or running, during the school scheduled timetable. 8g6Dl
I like team sports as a matter of fact … I believe team sports promote the goodness of working together. Team sports develop a sense of friendship and interaction. Team sports put us in many social situations where we need to express ourselves. Because team sports promote teamwork and foster relationships and kids also become better at communicating. Of course, Individual sports like tennis can be particularly beneficial for kids. They help Kids develop self-esteem, focus, and social skills while encouraging physical activities.
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develop a sense of friendship and interaction.
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promote teamwork and foster relationships and kids
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like tennis can be
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IELTS essay Many parents believe that children should play team sports like football, basketball and so on, instead of individual sports such as swimming or running, during the school scheduled timetable.

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