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Sculpture Courses to Be Discontinued. The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. State her opinion about and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

Sculpture Courses to Be Discontinued. The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. State her opinion about and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
It is argued that electronic books will completely take the place of paper books. In contrast, several people believe that physical books will have their space forever. From my perspective, printed version books are always going to continue selling. On the one hand, electronic books are more convenient since there are no volume and weight downsides, as a consequence, readers do not need to carry heavy and oversized books to work or school anymore. For instance, a recent study indicated that people have been reading more during the commuting time than ever, as anyone can download electronic books on their smartphones or their Kindle. Apart from that, digital books cost less than the physical version publication, due to the costs of paper, printing, and manufacturing, therefore many people would rather save money purchasing the first option. On the other hand, hardcover printed books can be kept as a record of what people have read, because usually avid readers like to exchange books with friends, as a result, traditional books can provide some uses which e-books cannot. For example, a recent survey found that 64% of London readers always swap books with friends, which they are not legally allowed to do with e-books. In addition, some individuals appreciate the feeling of turning the pages as they go through the book, given the fact that they are able to see how much of the book they have read, consequently preferring to buy hard copies. In conclusion, even though e-books have some benefits such as convenience and cost, in my opinion, traditional paper books will always have their own space in society, considering the uses and feelings they can provide to the reader.
It
is argued
that electronic
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books
will completely take the place of paper
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books
.
In contrast
, several
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people
believe that physical
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books
will have their space forever. From my perspective, printed version
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books
are always going to continue selling.

On the one hand, electronic
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books
are more convenient since there are no volume and weight downsides, as a consequence, readers do not need to carry heavy and oversized
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books
to work or school anymore.
For instance
, a recent study indicated that
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people
have been reading more during the commuting time than ever, as anyone can download electronic
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books
on their smartphones or their Kindle. Apart from that, digital
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books
cost less than the physical version publication, due to the costs of paper, printing, and manufacturing,
therefore
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many
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people
would
rather
save money purchasing the
first
option.

On the other hand
, hardcover printed
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books
can be
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kept
as a record of what
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people
have read,
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because
usually
avid readers like to exchange
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books
with friends,
as a result
, traditional
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books
can provide
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some
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uses
which e-books cannot.
For example
, a recent survey found that 64% of London readers always swap
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books
with friends, which they are not
legally
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allowed
to do with e-books.
In addition
,
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some
individuals appreciate the feeling of turning the pages as they go through the
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book
,
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given
the fact that they are able to
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see
how much of the
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book
they have read,
consequently
preferring to
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buy
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hard
copies.

In conclusion
,
even though
e-books have
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some
benefits such as convenience and cost, in my opinion, traditional paper
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books
will always have their
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own
space in society, considering the
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uses
and feelings they can provide to the reader.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Sculpture Courses to Be Discontinued. The woman expresses her opinion about the university's plan. State her opinion about and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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