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Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Governments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage. v.1

Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Governments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage. v. 1
Nowadays, climate change and global warming issues have become very popular and widely discussed issues. Many people discuss the evidence of climate change and propose solutions on how to solve a lot of problems from the climate change effect. Some people argue that government cannot be expected to tackle the problem because the cause of the problem is human mistakes. I agree with that, however, I believe that both government and individuals should take roles and solve the problem together. The roles of government are needed to solve the problem since they have the power to control societies. Firstly, the government should make and enforce regulations about vehicle use strictly. They have to reduce private motor vehicles by increasing the number of public transportation. Secondly, the rapid growth of forest destruction must be concerned by the government. They have to give severe punishment for illegal logging perpetrators to prevent further damage to the environment. Because of human activities as the primary cause of the climate change, people have to be responsible by taking positive actions. They should change their lifestyle and behaviour to reduce the impact of the problem. Doing simple things like throwing rubbish in the recycle bin, using electricity wisely, buying environment-friendly products, or planting trees will be really helpful. In conclusion, I believe that the climate change is the problem for all of people in this world – with no exception. The government and individuals should take roles and solve the problem together to minimize the impact of climate change.
Nowadays,
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climate
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and global warming issues have become
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very
popular and
widely
discussed issues.
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people
discuss the evidence of
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climate
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change
and propose solutions on how to
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solve
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a lot of
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problems
from the
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climate
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change
effect.
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Some
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people
argue that
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government
cannot be
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expected
to tackle the
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problem
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because
the cause of the
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problem
is human mistakes. I
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agree
with that,
however
, I believe that both
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government
and individuals should take roles and
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solve
the
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problem
together.

The roles of
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government
are needed
to
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solve
the
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problem
since they have the power to control societies.
Firstly
, the
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government
should
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make
and enforce regulations about vehicle
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use
strictly
. They
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have to
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reduce
private motor vehicles by increasing the number of public transportation.
Secondly
, the rapid growth of forest destruction
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must
be concerned
by the
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government
. They
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have to
give severe punishment for illegal logging perpetrators to
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prevent
further
damage to the environment.
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Because
of human activities as the primary cause of the
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climate
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change
,
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people
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have to
be responsible by taking
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positive
actions. They should
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change
their lifestyle and
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behaviour
to
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reduce
the impact of the
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problem
. Doing simple things like throwing rubbish in the recycle bin, using electricity
wisely
, buying environment-friendly products, or planting trees will be
really
helpful.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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climate
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change
is the
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problem
for all of
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people
in this world
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–
with no exception. The
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government
and individuals should take roles and
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solve
the
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problem
together to minimize the impact of
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climate
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change
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Governments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responsibility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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