Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Scientific research should be the responsibility of governments rather than commercial organizations. Do you agree or disagree?

Entire mankind witnessed the pace in the scientific research since first industrial revolution at the end of 17th century. It is the basis of ease in day to day human livelihood. As scientific research has become imperative and requires a lot of resource involvement, therefore it is the responsibility of both government and business enterprises pertaining to particular country. In order to understand the role of government and commercial organizations, factors leading to the success of research need to be understood. The first important factor is the money required for research decides the focus required for the scientist in their field. Many times the time can be bought from the economic condition of the corresponding the organization. Now a days besides the government number of powerful organization have been evolved who can take part in the research areas such as defense, Aerospace. The funding requirement for the research could easily fulfilled by private commercial organization as well as government. As the pivotal role of funding explained, the another key factor conceived as maintaining confidentiality of the innovations. if The lot of efforts have been put in the research since so many years it is the prerequisite for research to maintain the all resources in highly secured arena. Commercial organizations works now a days efficiently with the pillars of ISO standards and hence leads to this secured environment. There have been many success stories across the world for scientific researches. for example Tesla collaborated with NASA for autonomous vehicles on moon. Running and managing country itself portrays huge task that any support got from private firms bolsters the development of nation and government can nurture other portfolios. Increase in skilled worker who graduates every year has the mindset to work in private organizations where they envisage that there aspirations could take a leap. Therefore it is strongly recommended to encourage private commercial organization to perform in scientific regime to bring happiness for mankind by ensuring safety and quality.
Entire mankind witnessed the pace in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
since
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
first industrial revolution
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of 17th century. It is the basis of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
in day to day human livelihood. As
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
has become imperative and requires
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
resource involvement,
therefore
it is the responsibility of both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and business enterprises pertaining to particular country. In order to understand the role of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
commercial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
, factors leading to the success of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
need to
be understood
. The
first
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor is the money required for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
decides the focus required for the scientist in their field.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
times the time can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from the economic condition of the corresponding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
.
Did you mean “nowadays”?
Now a days
besides
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
number of powerful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
have
been evolved
who can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
areas such as defense, Aerospace. The funding requirement for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
could
easily
The modal verb ‘could’ requires the verb’s base form.
fulfilled
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
commercial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. As the pivotal role of funding
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
, the another key factor conceived as maintaining confidentiality of the innovations.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
if
The lot of efforts have
been put
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
since
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
years it is the prerequisite for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
to maintain the all resources in
highly
secured arena.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Commercial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
It seems that the correct verb form here is “work”.
works
Did you mean “nowadays”?
now a days
efficiently
with the pillars of ISO standards and
hence
leads to this secured environment. There have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
success stories across the world for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
researches
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
for
example Tesla collaborated with NASA for autonomous vehicles on moon. Running and managing country itself portrays huge task that any support
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
firms bolsters the development of nation and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
can nurture other portfolios. Increase in skilled worker who graduates every year has the mindset to work in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organizations
where they envisage that there aspirations could take a leap.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
it is
strongly
The verb ‘recommended’ is used with the gerund form: “recommended encouraging”.
recommended to encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
commercial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
organization
to perform in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scientific
regime to bring happiness for mankind by ensuring safety and quality.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Scientific research should be the responsibility of governments rather than commercial organizations.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts