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Science gives people life expectancy of close to one hundred years or even more. Some people view it in a positive light, but others believe it creates some problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Science gives people life expectancy of close to one hundred years or even more. Some people view it in a positive light, but others believe it creates some problems. v. 1
In the contemporary era, people live in a global village on earth due to the advanced development of digital devices and the internet. Although the quality of lives has been improved constantly, perfect communities have not achieved worldwide. In terms of each individual view, the criteria for a perfect community vary in terms of different cultures and historical backgrounds. The essay will list some criteria for an ideal community and some strategies to achieve an ideal community. To begin with, it is a fact that an ideal community will be determined by many factors. Firstly, a community consists of local residents; therefore, human beings with a kind heart and correct social values are one of the most important elements of an ideal community. In addition, a harmonious environment for local residents to raise their families is, also a crucial feature of a perfect community. Well-developed economic sector, family-friendly living environment, zero -level pollution and zero crime rate are all crucial elements for a perfect community. Last but not the least, a government that has always placed its residents' interest firstly will be another important feature as well. As a result, all citizens feel comfortable to raise their families there. How to establish a perfect society is an extremely tough task worldwide in the human history. I believe that following some strategies in any community will guide a community to develop into a perfect one. Firstly, it is crucial to establish a government which presents for local citizens' best interest. Then local citizens should realize that it also is their basic responsibility to contribute to the communities. Maintaining a clear living environment, fighting against any crimes and being a role model for their children all will contribute their communities to develop into perfect ones. Moreover, a perfect community should provide local residents with universal access to health care service and all kinds of education. In summary, as reviewing the history of human beings, there were many scholars worldwide had planned or even had carried out their agenda to establish a perfect community. In current advanced technology, a perfect community should provide harmony and peaceful living environment for its residents. To establish a perfect society will rely on many factors as well.
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people
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in a global village on earth due to the advanced development of digital devices and the internet. Although the quality of
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,
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perfect
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communities
have not achieved worldwide. In terms of each individual view, the criteria for a
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perfect
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community
vary in terms of
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different
cultures and historical backgrounds. The essay will list
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some
criteria for an
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ideal
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community
and
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community.

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begin
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ideal
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community
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many
factors.
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local
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residents
;
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important
elements of an
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community
.
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environment
for
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local
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residents
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also
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perfect
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community
. Well-developed economic sector, family-friendly living
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environment
, zero -level pollution and zero crime rate are all crucial elements for a
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perfect
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community
. Last
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that has always placed its residents' interest
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important
feature
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.
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, all citizens feel comfortable to raise their families there.

How to
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a
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society is an
extremely
tough task worldwide in the human history. I believe that following
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some
strategies in any
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community
will guide a
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community
to develop into a
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perfect
one.
Firstly
, it is crucial to
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establish
a
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government
which presents for
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local
citizens' best interest. Then
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local
citizens should realize that it
also
is their basic responsibility to contribute to the
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communities
. Maintaining a
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clear
living
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environment
, fighting against any crimes and being a role model for their children all will contribute their
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communities
to develop into
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perfect
ones.
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, a
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perfect
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community
should provide
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local
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residents
with universal access to health care service and all kinds of education.

In summary, as reviewing the history of human beings, there were
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many
scholars worldwide had planned or even had carried out their agenda to
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establish
a
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perfect
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community
. In
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current
advanced technology, a
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perfect
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community
should provide harmony and peaceful living
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environment
for its
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residents
. To
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establish
a
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perfect
society will rely on
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many
factors
as well
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Science gives people life expectancy of close to one hundred years or even more. Some people view it in a positive light, but others believe it creates some problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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