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Science and technology have improved the standards of living in all over the world. Some people claim that the role of the arts has become insignificant. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Science and technology have improved the standards of living in all over the world. Some people claim that the role of the arts has become insignificant. with this opinion? v. 1
Friendship is the most significant factor that each and everyone should have in this world. Friendship is the relation of love and care to people, whom you don’t have any blood relationship. It is argued that good to have friends who often have the equal view. However, others believe that friends who usually argue is better. People have different opinion about this because of their personal experience. This essay will elaborate both sides before arriving at a conclusion. One of the advantage is having friends with similar views always understand each other better. People have the same kind of thinking, they will support each other in difficult situations as they know how the other is feeling at that time. For instance, if someone facing some difficult situation or facing bad chapter in their life, friends will always help that person to handle that problem by providing moral support or any other assistance they need at that time. These friendships are very strong. On the other hand, it’s better to have friends who share opposite opinions. They look at the problems in different way. For example, if the people are going to make a wrong decision, friends with different view will highlight them about their decision make damage for them and prevent it. Hence, having different opinion among friends also valuable. But it’s not valid always. In conclusion, I believe that a person should have both kind of friends in their life. Because in some situations we are not always accurate and as well as we are not accurate. For that, having both kind of friends we can move forward with successful lifetime.
Friendship is the most significant factor that each and
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everyone
should have in this world. Friendship is the relation of
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love
and care to
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people
, whom you don’t have any blood relationship. It
is argued
that
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good
to have
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friends
who
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often
have the equal view.
However
, others believe that
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friends
who
usually
argue is better.
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People
have
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different
opinion about this
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because
of their personal experience. This essay will elaborate both sides
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before
arriving at a conclusion.

One of the advantage is having
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friends
with similar views always understand each
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other
better.
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People
have the same kind of thinking, they will support each
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other
in difficult situations as they know how the
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other
is feeling at that time.
For instance
, if someone facing
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some
difficult situation or facing
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bad
chapter in their life,
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friends
will always
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help
that person to handle that problem by providing moral support or any
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other
assistance they need at that time. These friendships are
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very
strong.

On the
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other
hand, it’s better to have
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friends
who share opposite opinions. They look at the problems in
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different
way.
For example
, if the
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people
are going to
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make
a
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wrong
decision,
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friends
with
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different
view will highlight them about their decision
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make
damage for them and
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prevent
it.
Hence
, having
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different
opinion among
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friends
also
valuable.
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But
it’s not valid
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always
.

In conclusion
, I believe that a person should have both kind of
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friends
in their life.
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Because
in
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some
situations we are not always accurate and
as well
as we are not accurate. For that, having both kind of
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friends
we can
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move
forward with successful lifetime.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Science and technology have improved the standards of living in all over the world. Some people claim that the role of the arts has become insignificant. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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