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Schools are spending more time in traditional subjects like history etc. They should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help them find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Schools are spending more time in traditional subjects like history etc. They should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help them find a job. yeNV
Whether it is to understand the traditional way of life or ancient cultures, everybody needs to learn history at every aspect of his life. Some people argue that learning history is not skill efficient and schools should allocate less time to teach about it and focus more on vocational subjects such as communication skills and time management to help students in future for better job prospects. Whether or not this perspective is good is a moot point. This essay will delve into both the viewpoints further. To begin with, skills learnt in schools paves the way to implement the cornerstone of the life for future growth. Classroom study should inculcate teaching basic skills of life such as communication skills, time management and business organisation, which is the basic requirement of working in an organisation, and it will in turn help the early learners to develop those skills earlier in life and find better job opportunities in future. For example, the curriculum of the school subject of former President of India, Late APJ Abdul Kalam, includes people management skill, which helped Mr. Kalam to understand different personalities during his journey to become President. Had the school not taught this subject, he would have faced difficulties to manage clashing viewpoints in the Parliament and NASA and he would not have become the Missile Man of India. On the face of it, learning about past seem to be waste of precious time; however is there any downfall to this phenomenon? History plays a paramount role in every aspect of life and the school goers should need to develop the skill to read history and learn from it at early stage of their life. At every corner of the choosen career, one has to read history to understand the foundation of his selected subject. To illustrate, Doctors need to read history of medicals to understand and prescribe suitable medicines; Astronauts needs to refer back to history of their failed launches in order to evaluate what went wrong and learn from it and avoid future mistakes. If it had not been involvement of history, the innovation and development through correction of mistakes would have not been possible. To conclude, it is true that basic skills learnt at early stages of life makes the process of finding suitable and desering job easier, however one should not ignore the study of ancient life altogether. In my opinion, teachers should strike-out a clear balance between the two and with clever use, one can harness the unlimited potential of school goers.
Whether it is to
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understand
the traditional way of
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life
or ancient cultures, everybody
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needs
to learn
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history
at every aspect of his
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life
.
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Some
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people
argue that learning
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history
is not
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skill
efficient and
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schools
should allocate less
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time
to teach about it and focus more on vocational
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subjects
such as communication
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skills
and
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time
management to
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help
students in
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future
for better job prospects.
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Whether or not
this perspective is
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good
is a moot point. This essay will delve into both the viewpoints
further
.

To
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begin
with,
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skills
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learnt
in
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schools
paves the way to implement the cornerstone of the
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life
for
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future
growth. Classroom study should inculcate teaching basic
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skills
of
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life
such as communication
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skills
,
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time
management and business
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organisation
, which is the basic requirement of working in an
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organisation
, and it will in turn
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help
the early learners to develop those
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skills
earlier in
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life
and find better job opportunities in
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future
.
For example
, the curriculum of the
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school
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subject
of former President of India, Late APJ Abdul
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Kalam
, includes
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people
management
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skill
, which
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helped
Mr.
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Kalam
to
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understand
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different
personalities during his journey to become President. Had the
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school
not taught this
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subject
, he would have faced difficulties to manage clashing viewpoints in the Parliament and
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NASA and
he would not have become the Missile
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Man
of India.

On the face of it, learning about past seem to be waste of precious
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time
;
however
is there any downfall to this phenomenon?
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History
plays a paramount role in every aspect of
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life
and the
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school
goers should
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need
to develop the
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skill
to read
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history
and learn from it at early stage of their
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life
. At every corner of the
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choosen
career, one
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has to
read
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history
to
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understand
the foundation of his selected
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subject
. To illustrate, Doctors
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need
to read
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history
of medicals to
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understand
and prescribe suitable medicines; Astronauts
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needs
to refer back to
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history
of their failed launches in order to evaluate what went
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wrong
and learn from it and avoid
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future
mistakes. If it had not been involvement of
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history
, the innovation and development through correction of mistakes would have not been possible.

To conclude
, it is true that basic
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skills
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learnt at
early stages of
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life
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makes
the process of finding suitable and
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desering
job easier,
however
one should not
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ignore
the study of ancient
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life
altogether. In my opinion, teachers should strike-out a
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clear
balance between the two and with clever
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use
, one can harness the unlimited potential of
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school
goers.
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IELTS essay Schools are spending more time in traditional subjects like history etc. They should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help them find a job.

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4 paragraphs
422 words
5.5
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