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School teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of students than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

It is true that school children are at an impressionable age, and two strong influences on their intelligence and social development are teachers and parents. While I accept that teachers may have more influence on the intelligence of their pupils, I would argue that parents probably exert a greater influence on the social development of their children. In terms of encouraging intellectual development and stimulating the intelligence of school children, I believe that teachers play the major role. While not all teachers are capable of inspiring their students, they are trained to impart their knowledge of their subject areas in challenging and imaginative ways. For example, some students owe their lifelong love of a subject to dedicated teachers who taught this discipline in secondary school. Of course, at home, parents may also reinforce this passion by encouraging good study habits during the formative years of their children. Such support is vital for academic achievement. From the perspective of social development, I think that parents are mainly responsible for guiding their children. Firstly, they spend far more time with their children than any individual teacher is able to do. They can therefore monitor the activities of children outside school hours, at weekends and during holidays. Secondly, parents are able to provide role models in a whole range of situations. These might include showing respect towards elders, choice of friends, or proper behaviour in public when eating out in restaurants. In conclusion, although teachers probably have a greater effect in stimulating the intelligence of school children, parental influences on the development of children are stronger in social situations.
It is true that
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school
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children
are at an impressionable age, and two strong
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influences
on their
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intelligence
and
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social
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development
are
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teachers
and
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parents
. While I accept that
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teachers
may have more
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influence
on the
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intelligence
of their pupils, I would argue that
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parents
probably
exert a greater
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influence
on the
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social
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development
of their children.

In terms of encouraging intellectual
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development
and stimulating the
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intelligence
of
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school
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children
, I believe that
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teachers
play the major role. While not all
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teachers
are capable of inspiring their students, they
are trained
to impart their knowledge of their subject areas in challenging and imaginative ways.
For example
,
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some
students owe their lifelong
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love
of a subject to dedicated
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teachers
who taught this discipline in secondary
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school
.
Of course
, at home,
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parents
may
also
reinforce this passion by encouraging
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good
study habits during the formative years of their
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children
. Such support is vital for academic achievement.

From the perspective of
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social
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development
, I
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think
that
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parents
are
mainly
responsible for guiding their
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children
.
Firstly
, they spend far more time with their
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children
than any individual
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teacher
is able to do. They can
therefore
monitor the activities of
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children
outside
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school
hours, at weekends and during holidays.
Secondly
,
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parents
are able to provide role models in a whole range of situations. These might include showing respect towards elders, choice of friends, or proper
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behaviour
in public when eating out in restaurants.

In conclusion
, although
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teachers
probably
have a greater effect in stimulating the
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intelligence
of
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school
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children
, parental
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influences
on the
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development
of
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children
are stronger in
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social
situations.
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IELTS essay School teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of students than parents.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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