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Santa Claus is coming in Christmas

Santa Claus is coming in Christmas 6KbL3
When I was young child like 6 years old, I was waiting Santa Claus because Santa Claus give me a lot of present. So I waited my house near the tree. My house there is a big tree so I really enjoyed decorated tree because Santa Claus also enjoyed a tree. He gave me and my sister big present. Also sometimes I really nervous when I was bad action to my mom or dad because Santa Claus does not give present bad people.
When I
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, I was waiting Santa Claus
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Santa Claus give me
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a lot of
present.
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there is a
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big
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tree
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so
I
really
enjoyed decorated
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tree
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because
Santa Claus
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enjoyed a
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. He gave me and my sister
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big
present.
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Also
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action to my mom or dad
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IELTS essay Santa Claus is coming in Christmas

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
83 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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