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Proposal to stop bullying at school

Proposal to stop bullying at school G3k9e
Nowadays among the pupils there are lots of misunderstanding and bullying each other which causes much more perturbed or worried accidents. We can not hide this matter or we might not be unconcerned to bullying because we are run into this issue every single day at school. As a fact that when pupils or may students become more on the rocks or not see eye to eye the one who are brave or gutsy show some unethical behaviour or be abrasive to to weak pupils or younger ones. For seeing these actions we cannot be as blind as a bat in order not to get off on the wrong foot as well as not be impervious to these. To prevent or stop bullying at school I suggest a weekend meeting with parents who are responsible for own children's upbringing and bad behaviour therefore we will improve or patch things up relationship with pupils. In addition to this, pupils should be involved any kind of psychological questions about their normal behaviours and might be interesting games who works together and this kind of activities lead to friendly atmosphere or pupils will be able to get fair attitude towards others. To sum up I propose that it might be true if there will be organized a weekly meeting with pupils and parents together moreover to correct one bad behaviour giving opportunity to change to be good.
Nowadays among the
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pupils
there are lots of misunderstanding and bullying each other which causes much more perturbed or worried accidents. We can not
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this
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matter or
we might not
be unconcerned
to bullying
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because
we
are run
into this issue every single day at school. As a fact that when
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pupils
or may students become more on the rocks or not
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see
eye to eye the one who are brave or gutsy
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show
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some
unethical
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behaviour
or be abrasive
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to to
weak
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pupils
or younger ones. For seeing these actions we cannot be as blind as a bat in order not to
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get
off on the
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wrong
foot
as well
as not be impervious to these. To
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prevent
or
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stop
bullying at school I suggest a weekend meeting with parents who are responsible for
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own
children's upbringing and
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bad
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behaviour
therefore
we will
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improve
or patch things up relationship with
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pupils
.
In addition
to this,
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pupils
should
be involved
any kind of psychological questions about their normal
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behaviours
and might be interesting games who
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works
together and this kind of activities lead to friendly atmosphere or
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pupils
will be able to
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get
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fair
attitude towards others. To sum up I propose that it might be true if there will
be organized
a weekly meeting with
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pupils
and parents together
moreover
to correct one
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bad
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behaviour
giving opportunity to
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change
to be
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good
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IELTS essay Proposal to stop bullying at school

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  American English
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