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Sailing in the ocean with a pirate ship

Sailing in the ocean with a pirate ship 7J20b

As a “pirate” I wrote this roman to describe how my life went by on the oceans, robbing islands and collecting the “unwanted” Gold. So you may find interesting this imaginary life story of a young pirate named Pete. Pete will face much difficulties and hard challanges. Life goes by and he is realizing that he spent all his life on the ocean. Author Note: My name is Klerti Malaj and i am a young author who loves to write. This Roman describes the life of a pirate and it’s completely imaginary. CHAPTER ONE Burst into tears near the trash a old man named Billy found me. I was a 8 months baby abandoned by my biological parents. The old man gave me a heart warming look that made me stop the tears. While i was getting relaxed on his arms resting i fell asleep. He brought me to his home and kept me as a legal child.

As a “pirate” I wrote this roman to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :characterizeportray
describe
 how my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
 went by on the oceans, robbing islands and collecting the “unwanted” Gold. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 you may find interesting this imaginary You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
 story of a young pirate named Pete. Pete will face Use "many" with countable nouns.many
much
 difficulties and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
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challanges
. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
Life
 goes Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).by, and
by and
 he The verb 'realizing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is realizing
 that he spent all his You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
 on the ocean.

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Klerti
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Malaj
 and Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 am a young author who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiresadores
loves
 to write. This Roman This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :characterizesportrays
describes
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
 of a pirate and it’s completely imaginary.

CHAPTER ONE

Burst into tears near the trash Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualresidentcitizen
man
 named Billy found me. I was Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 8 months baby abandoned by my biological parents. The This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualresidentcitizen
man
 gave me a This word is normally spelled with hyphen.heart-warming
heart warming
 look that made me This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 the tears. “While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 was getting relaxed on his arms resting Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 fell asleep. He brought me to his home and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 me as a legal child. 