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Safety standards are important when building people s homes Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes the government or the people who build the houses v.2

Safety standards are important when building people s homes Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes the government or the people who build the houses v. 2
Adequate safety measurements must be taken into consideration, when residential apartments are constructed, to avoid occurrence of any unpleasant incident. Generally, standards which are concerned with the safety of all residents in the area, must be ensured by the government. However, for some, people can have their freedom of choice, whether to implement that particular strategy for their safety or not. As such, authorities must provide guidelines to the builders, for the quality of materials to be used for the construction process. If material is found of inferior quality, it should be banned for use. Other things which are to be ensured by the governing bodies are, the obligatory installation of fire extinguishers and smoke detectors in homes. Government should also assist people by providing the information regarding earthquake prone areas and also set the number of storeys to be allowed while building homes in a specific area. People should also be aware about the safety codes and what they can do in this direction is, the use of equipment to avoid malfunctioning of electricity and gas supply. Besides this, whether to equip their homes with CCTV cameras or to use automatic locks and doors, is solely their individual decision. Government should not make any compulsions for such arrangements. To conclude, safety assurance should be the first priority of government as well as masses while building new homes. Initially, It will seem time consuming and tedious to spend money on such practices, but in the long run, citizens wil feel safer in case of mishappenings.
Adequate
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safety
measurements
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must
be taken
into consideration, when residential apartments
are constructed
, to avoid occurrence of any unpleasant incident.
Generally
, standards which
are concerned
with the
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safety
of all residents in the area,
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must
be ensured
by the
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government
.
However
, for
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some
,
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people
can have their freedom of choice, whether to implement that particular strategy for their
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safety
or not.

As such, authorities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
provide guidelines to the builders, for the quality of materials to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for the construction process. If material
is found
of inferior quality, it should
be banned
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. Other things which are to
be ensured
by the governing bodies are, the obligatory installation of fire extinguishers and smoke detectors in
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homes
.
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Government
should
also
assist
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people
by providing the information regarding earthquake prone areas and
also
set the number of
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storeys
to be
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allowed
while building
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homes
in a specific area.

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People
should
also
be aware about the
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safety
codes and what they can do in this direction is, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of equipment to avoid malfunctioning of electricity and gas supply.
Besides
this, whether to equip their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
with CCTV cameras or to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
automatic locks and doors, is
solely
their individual decision.
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Government
should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
any compulsions for such arrangements.

To conclude
,
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safety
assurance should be the
first
priority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
as well
as masses while building new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
homes
.
Initially
, It will seem
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time consuming
and tedious to spend money on such practices,
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but
in the long run, citizens
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wil
feel safer in case of
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mishappenings
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Safety standards are important when building people s homes Who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes the government or the people who build the houses v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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