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Government should spend more money on railways than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.6

Government should spend more money on railways than roads. with this statement? v. 6
Government officials should invest more funds on building railways than the roads. While I do agree that the money on railways should be increase but the roads should not be completely ignored. Each have their own pros and cons. Railways are one of the important transportation services in every country. In metro cities most of the population prefers traveling by trains rather than going by cars or cab. Traveling by trains saves a lot of time as well as it is cheaper than booking a cab. Trains also helps in avoiding the traffic that is usually caused on roads. Trains are helpful when a person doesn’t have a car and have to travel a long distance. Hence, it is important to improve the railway tracks for the betterment of people. On the other hand, roads are helpful when the distance is less or when you have to go to neighbourhood. Trains facilities are very limited. Not every city have metro train facility. Building a train facility takes lot of money as it requires building of multiple things such as tracks, train compartments, stations, etc. While roads requires only road building material. So, building roads takes less money than the railways. Sometimes a train network takes years to build, while building roads takes only months to build. So, building roads is as important as building railways. Therefore, I believe that roads and railways are equally important for every city. Hence, government so spent same amount of money on railways and on roads.
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officials should invest more funds on
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building
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railways
than the
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. While I do
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agree
that the
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money
on
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railways
should be increase
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but
the
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roads
should not be completely
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ignored
. Each have their
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own
pros and cons.

Railways are one of the
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important
transportation services in every country. In metro cities most of the population prefers traveling by
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trains
rather
than going by cars or cab. Traveling by
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trains
saves
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a lot of
time
as well
as it is cheaper than booking a cab.
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Trains
also
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helps
in avoiding the traffic
that is
usually
caused on
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roads
.
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Trains
are helpful when a person doesn’t have a car and
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have to
travel a long distance.
Hence
, it is
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important
to
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improve
the
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railway
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tracks
for the betterment of
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people
.

On the other hand
,
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roads
are helpful when the distance is less or when you
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have to
go to
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neighbourhood
.
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Trains
facilities are
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very
limited. Not every city have metro
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train
facility.
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Building
a
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train
facility takes
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lot of
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money
as it requires
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building
of multiple things such as
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tracks
,
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train
compartments, stations, etc.
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While
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roads
requires
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only
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road
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building
material.
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,
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building
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roads
takes less
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money
than the
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railways
.
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Sometimes
a
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train
network takes years to build, while
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building
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roads
takes
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only
months to build.
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,
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building
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roads
is as
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important
as
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building
railways.

Therefore
, I believe that
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roads
and
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railways
are
equally
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important
for every city.
Hence
,
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government
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so
spent same amount of
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money
on
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railways
and on
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roads
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend more money on railways than roads. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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