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Robert Kiyosaki book "Rich dad and poor dad" Write 3 WORST IDEAS from the book and give detailed reasons to support your statement.

Robert Kiyosaki book "Rich dad and poor dad" Write 3 WORST IDEAS from the book and give detailed reasons to support your statement. AwELX
This assignment is about a book called “Rich Dad and Poor Dad” by Robert Kiyosaki. It has a lot of useful information and has some drawbacks. Now I will explain 3 misconceptions mentioned in this book. Firstly, as Robert Kiyosaki points out, it is possible to start a personal life just by getting financial knowledge without going to school. But in reality school serves as preliminary fundament for children to prepare for life. It broadens their horizon and perspective helping them to gain a lot of knowledge through it. For instance, even the Bill Gates and Elon Musk also went to school and with the education they learned at school they both managed to get financial knowledge that paved the way for they to proceed and prosper in their fields relentlessly. Secondly, another cons of kiyosaki’s work is that in order to get financial education, young people need to study and work at the same time. In many countries, the laws centered on human rights prohibit the employment and use of children. Because this situation may bring with it various bad consequences. For example, they may derive some more negative traits, feeling prematurely as a result of being exposed to the workplace at the early age. And also, parents are not only unwilling to let their young children to drop off school but also they want them to be safe and consume a particular amount of knowledge until they reach to adulthood when they would be able to feel responsibility and make some choices and decisions in the right way in all respects. Studying at school prior to learning financial education would guarantee the prosperity of their own and the country they are in living as well. Thirdly, in many developed countries such as The United States, Germany, The Great Britain, Russia and Korea bank loans are given at low interest rate. According to Robert Kiyosaki, his advice which is aimed at helping people all around the globe may be applied successfully in sort of these highlighted countries above but in developing countries bank loans have significantly higher interest rate and taxes on deposits are much higher than their counterparts. For instance, in Uzbekistan and some of other Asian countries Robert Kiyosaki’s point about loan may turn out to be somehow useless since they have limited ones with significantly high interest rates. In conclusion, as coin has two sides, although the work of kiosoki is full of invaluable advice and tips, readers should take the contents into serious consideration.
This assignment is about a book called “Rich Dad and Poor Dad” by Robert
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Kiyosaki
. It has
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a lot of
useful information and has
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some
drawbacks.
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Now
I will
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explain
3 misconceptions mentioned in this book.
Firstly
, as Robert
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Kiyosaki
points out, it is possible to
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start
a personal life
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just
by getting
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financial
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knowledge
without going to
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school
.
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But
in reality
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school
serves as preliminary fundament for children to prepare for life. It broadens their horizon and perspective helping them to gain
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a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
through it.
For instance
, even the Bill Gates and Elon Musk
also
went to
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school
and with the education they learned at
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school
they both managed to
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get
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financial
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knowledge
that paved the way for they to proceed and prosper in their fields
relentlessly
.

Secondly
, another cons of
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kiyosaki
’s work is that in order to
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get
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financial
education, young
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people
need to study and work at the same time. In
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many
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countries
, the laws centered on human rights prohibit the employment and
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use
of children.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
this situation may bring with it various
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bad
consequences.
For example
, they may derive
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some
more
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negative
traits, feeling
prematurely
as a result
of
being exposed
to the workplace at the early age. And
also
, parents are not
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only
unwilling to
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let
their young children to drop off
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
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but
also
they want them to be safe and consume a particular amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
until they reach to adulthood when they would be able to feel responsibility and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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some
choices and decisions in the right way in all respects. Studying at
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school
prior to learning
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financial
education would guarantee the prosperity of their
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own
and the
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country
they are in living
as well
.

Thirdly
, in
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many
developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
such as The United States, Germany, The Great Britain, Russia and Korea bank loans are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
at low interest rate. According to Robert
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Kiyosaki
, his advice which
is aimed
at helping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
all around the globe may
be applied
successfully
in sort of these highlighted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
above
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but
in developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
bank loans have
significantly
higher interest rate and taxes on deposits are much higher than their counterparts.
For instance
, in Uzbekistan and
Consider using "some other" or "some of the other".
some of other
Asian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
Robert
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Kiyosaki
’s point about loan may turn out to be somehow useless since they have limited ones with
significantly
high interest rates.

In conclusion
, as coin has two sides, although the work of
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kiosoki
is full of invaluable advice and tips, readers should take the contents into serious consideration.
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IELTS essay Robert Kiyosaki book "Rich dad and poor dad" Write 3 WORST IDEAS from the book and give detailed reasons to support your statement.

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