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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. v. 3
English is a widely recognized global language without a doubt. It is often seen that region dialects are overlooked in many places in these modernized worlds. But it is obvious that if one should be sophisticated in life English plays a vital role. In my opinion, it is important for everyone to learn English at the same time it is equally important to preserve local dialect. English has been spoken by over so well-advanced nations. Every individual has a keen to settle in such developed countries. In this case English speaking skills come in handy Most importantly, the nations such as US, UK, AUSTRAILIA, CANADA one major destinations for best education where English as their mother tongue, so one must be fluent in English to settle in those destinations. Moreover, one with good enough English command has the profound opportunity in life to lead comfortable life than one with not because many of the international organizations are doing trade with highly developed countries where the employee need to speak English comfortably. so the client gets clear idea and can share his views with ease. A person with ample of English knowledge has a great demand and have a chance to visit plethora places. However, I feel the local dialects are on the verge of dying out. It is the responsibility of every individual to learn his/her mother language. Mother tongue is the best option to learn the ethics of their culture. For example, Ayurveda, a traditional healing practice is written in Sanskrit, as many now are preferring for natural cure there is a need for learning this ancient language. Adding this linguistics in school curriculum makes pupil aware of historical dialects, parents should also speak with their kids in their mother tongue and government must take special initiatives to preserve these dying languages. In conclusion, however English is necessary to succeed in all walks of their local dialect. Both universal and regional languages have their equal significance.
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language
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that region
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dialects
are overlooked
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places in these modernized worlds.
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But
it is obvious that if one should
be sophisticated
in life English plays a vital role. In my opinion, it is
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important
for everyone to learn English at the same time it is
equally
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important
to preserve local dialect.

English has
been spoken
by over
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so
well-advanced nations. Every individual has a keen to settle in such
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developed countries
.
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English speaking
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skills
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come
in handy Most
importantly
, the nations such as US, UK,
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AUSTRAILIA
, CANADA one major destinations for best education where English as their
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mother
tongue,
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one
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must
be fluent in English to settle in those destinations.
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good
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enough
English command has the profound opportunity in life to lead comfortable life than one with not
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because
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many
of the international organizations are doing trade with
highly
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developed countries
where the employee need to speak English
comfortably
.
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so
the client
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gets
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clear
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idea
and can share his views with
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ease
. A person with ample of English knowledge has a great demand and have a chance to visit plethora places.

However
, I feel the local
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dialects
are on the verge of dying out. It is the responsibility of every individual to learn his/her
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mother
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language
.
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Mother
tongue is the best option to learn the ethics of their culture.
For example
, Ayurveda, a traditional healing practice
is written
in Sanskrit, as
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many
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now
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are preferring
for natural cure there is a need for learning this ancient
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language
. Adding this linguistics in school curriculum
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makes
pupil aware of historical
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dialects
, parents should
also
speak with their kids in their
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mother
tongue and
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government
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must
take special initiatives to preserve these dying languages.

In conclusion
,
however
English is necessary to succeed in all walks of their local
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dialect
. Both universal and regional
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languages
have their equal significance.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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