Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some believe that, although wealthy nations usually grant monetary help to poor countries, yet it does not help to reduce poverty. Thus, developed nations should grant other forms of aids to the poor countries rather than just the financial help. I partially agree, with the statement and I shall discuss about the same in this essay. To begin with, due to globalisation various countries have started investing in other nations and grant money as well. This definitely helps the underdeveleoped countries and solve their monetary requirements. However, this only helps partially and not completely removes poverty. To help the poverty stricken population some continuous steps should be adopted. Rich regions should try to help poor nations with other aids such as employment. For instance, big countries can set up their factories in poor nations which will bring more job opportunities in such underdeveloped countries and people of these areas will get more work. Hence, regular income can solve the problem of poor section of society. Additionally, developed regions can help other poor nations with various ideas on how to generate money and utilise it towards welfare and upliftment of poor people. On the other hand, I believe that if wealthy nations will constantly support weaker countries then, such countries will become dependent on them and will never be able to help their own people and run own country all by themselves. Therefore, I support the idea that countries should help each other in case of need and emergenct but not to an extent where poor countries completely start to rely on wealthy nations for each and every thing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
believe that, although wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
usually
grant monetary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
yet
it does not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
poverty.
Thus
, developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
should grant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
forms of aids to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
rather
than
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
the financial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
. I
partially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
, with the statement and I shall
Did you mean simply “discuss the”? You do not need the word “about” here.
discuss about the
same in this essay.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, due to
Possible spelling mistake. ‘globalisation’ is British English.
globalisation
various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
investing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
and grant money
as well
. This definitely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
the
Possible spelling mistake found.
underdeveleoped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
and solve their monetary requirements.
However
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
partially
and not completely removes poverty. To
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
the
This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.
poverty stricken
population
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
continuous steps should
be adopted
.

Rich regions should try to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
aids such as employment.
For instance
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
can set up their factories in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
which will bring more job opportunities in such underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of these areas will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more work.
Hence
, regular income can solve the problem of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
section of society.

Additionally
, developed regions can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
with various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
on how to generate money and
Possible spelling mistake. ‘utilise’ is British English.
utilise
it towards welfare and
Possible spelling mistake found.
upliftment
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, I believe that if wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
will
constantly
support weaker
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
then, such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
will become dependent on them and will never be able to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and run
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
all by themselves.
Therefore
, I support the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
in case of need and
Possible spelling mistake found.
emergenct
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not to an extent where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to rely on wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
for each and every thing.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts