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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.11

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. v. 11
Rich countries have helped poorer countries financially for decades now. It’s time for a change! Other ways of aid should be given. This essay will argue whether developed countries should give other types of support to developing countries or not. I think it is completely necessary to give support in other ways other than money. Some people believe that financial support is a good option because, the country can choose what to do with the money. For instance, if they have more schools than hospitals, they will choose to put most of the money on hospitals rather than schools. They also believe it is much easier to provide money rather than buy the resources and find a way to transport the resources. For example, if a developed country would like to provide poor countries with school equipments like desks, chairs and boards, they will have to buy them and send an airplane to transport all the resources. However, there are other alternative ways for aid other than money that underdeveloped countries will find more useful. For example, receiving food will definitely solve the issues of hunger. Also, financial support can lead to corruption if handled by the wrong people. For instance, people can take the money and spend it on illegal items such as, drugs. So it would be of no benefit for the country and it definitely won’t solve poverty. Therefore, direct support to poor countries will be of great benefit. In conclusion, this essay argued that there are other forms of support other than finiancial support that would benefit countries in need. In my opinion providing money is not the best form of help to underdeveloped countries.
Rich
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countries
have
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helped
poorer
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countries
financially
for decades
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now
. It’s time for a
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change
!
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Other
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ways
of aid should be
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given
. This essay will argue whether developed
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countries
should give
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other
types of
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support
to developing
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countries
or not. I
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think
it is completely necessary to give
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support
in
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other
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ways
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other
than money.

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people
believe that financial
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support
is a
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good
option
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because
, the
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country
can choose what to do with the
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money
.
For instance
, if they have more schools than hospitals, they will choose to put most of the
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money
on hospitals
rather
than schools. They
also
believe it is much easier to provide
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money
rather
than
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buy
the resources and find a
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way
to transport the resources.
For example
, if a developed
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country
would like to provide poor
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countries
with school equipments like desks, chairs and boards, they will
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have to
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buy
them and
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send
an airplane to transport all the resources.

However
, there are
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other
alternative
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ways
for aid
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other
than
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money
that underdeveloped
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countries
will find more useful.
For example
, receiving food will definitely solve the issues of hunger.
Also
, financial
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support
can lead to corruption if handled by the
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wrong
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people
.
For instance
,
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people
can take the
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money
and spend it on illegal items such as, drugs.
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So
it would be of no benefit for the
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country
and it definitely won’t solve poverty.
Therefore
, direct
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support
to poor
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countries
will be of great benefit.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that there are
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other
forms of
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support
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other
than
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finiancial
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support
that would benefit
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countries
in need. In my opinion providing
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money
is not the best form of
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help
to underdeveloped
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countries
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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