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A new sports centre has recently opened in our town. Last week, I went there with a group of friends. Although they had several problems, it was overall pretty good. The place looked really nice and had a good choice of activities and classes. The sports centre has a great number of facilities, including a large sports hall, a swimming pool, outdoor grass, and even a sauna. They also offer classes so you can learn great tips from the coaches and improve your skills. However, only a limited number of people can register for the classes due to the number of coaches.
A new sports
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
has recently opened in our town. Last week, I went there with a group of friends. Although they had several problems, it was
overall
pretty
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. The place looked
really
nice and had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
choice of activities and classes.

The sports
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
has a great number of facilities, including a large sports hall, a swimming pool, outdoor grass, and even a sauna. They
also
offer classes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you can learn great tips from the coaches and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
However
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a limited number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can register for the classes due to the number of coaches.
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IELTS essay review of sports centre for school magazine

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
102 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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