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Da Lat is one of view beautiful that I knew in Vietnam. I did not know how long has it been since I went travel Da Lat 2 years ago. I took 8 hours to Lam Dong by bus with my family. Especially, I was surprised by the climate here that it is cold and very quiet with a huge number of trees. First, My family separated a two-room consisting of my father with me staying in the room and the last room is my mother with sister stay in the room. In the evening, I came to Lam Vien square which here is interesting in Da Lat; I bought any food such as cream, fruits, etc. Moreover, we have visited “Thung lung Tinh yeu” which is romantic so I loved it here. Besides that, when I was walking in the stress, the dog run quickly about me with friendly. After this outing, I felt satisfied with the journey due to the fact it brought many things. If I have time I would like to go back to Da Lat with my friends.
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Lat is one of view
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beautiful
that I knew in Vietnam. I did not know how long has it been since I went travel
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Da
Lat 2 years ago. I took 8 hours to Lam Dong by bus with my family.
Especially
, I
was surprised
by the climate here that it is
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cold
and
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very
quiet with a huge number of trees.
First
, My family separated a two-room consisting of my father with me staying in the room and the last room is my mother with sister stay in the room. In the evening, I came to Lam
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Vien
square which here is
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interesting
in
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Da
Lat; I
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bought
any food such as cream, fruits, etc.
Moreover
, we have visited “
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Thung
lung
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Tinh
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yeu
” which is romantic
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so
I
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loved
it here.
Besides
that, when I was walking in the
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stress
, the dog run
quickly
about me with friendly. After this outing, I felt satisfied with the journey due to the fact it brought
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many
things.
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If
I have time I would like to go back to
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Da
Lat with my friends.
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IELTS essay wirting about my traveling

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