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Restriction of mobile phones in school positive or negative develpoment?

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Many schools have restricted the use of mobile phones despite the fact that they can be useful for safety purposes. While mobile phones may have many positive aspects, they have more negative aspects as they emit many radiations which can be detrimental to a student's health. In my opinion, this step of banning mobile phones is a positive development as it may help students to concentrate in the class and study properly. Restricting mobile phone use in the classroom can improve learning. If there are no mobile phones, then, there will be no distraction. Hence, students will concentrate on more what is taught in the class. There will be no beeps and buzzes occurring in the class, and even teachers could focus more on teaching. When students carry their mobiles, it may vibrate after a short interval leading to distraction of nearby students because nobody could focus on learning. Due to this, students could have weak rudiments, and they would not excel in life. Since mobiles are the cause of hindrance in the study, and they also lead to lack of concentration, they should be banned completely. Mobile phones emit a lot of radiations that can be deleterious for a child's health. It has been scientifically proven that mobile phones' radiations lead to cancer in humans. It starts from a tumuor, which then turns into a cancer. Now a days, diseases in students at a smaller age has become so common that every other student is suffering from a serious illness. Since mobile phones have so many postive uses, we always forget how harmful they are for mankind. Students in their small age are more prone to such kind of radiations and it could cause severe damage to them. They are the upcoming future of a country and they should not be put into any kind of danger. Mobile phones should be banned in the schools across world beacuse of their harmful radiations that they emit despite the fact that they could be useful in many other ways. We all know that mobile phones contain so much erudite material in them which can help in studying and understanding facts, but the distractions they cause, and the radiations they emit are far more deleterious to a student's health as well as learning. So, mobile phones should be banned undisputedly across the world in all the schools.
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despite the fact that they can be useful for safety purposes. While mobile
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aspects, they have more
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aspects as they
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radiations
which can be detrimental to a student's health. In my opinion, this step of banning mobile
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phones
is a
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positive
development as it may
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help
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students
to concentrate in the
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class
and study
properly
.

Restricting mobile
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phone
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use
in the classroom can
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improve
learning. If there are no mobile
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phones
, then, there will be no distraction.
Hence
,
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students
will concentrate on more what
is taught
in the
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class
. There will be no beeps and buzzes occurring in the
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class
, and even teachers could focus more on teaching. When
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students
carry their mobiles, it may vibrate after a short interval leading to distraction of nearby
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students
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because
nobody could focus on learning. Due to this,
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students
could have weak rudiments, and they would not excel in life. Since mobiles are the cause of hindrance in the study, and they
also
lead to lack of concentration, they should
be banned
completely.

Mobile
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phones
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emit
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a lot of
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radiations
that can be deleterious for a child's health. It has been
scientifically
proven that mobile phones'
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radiations
lead to cancer in humans. It
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starts
from a
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tumuor
, which then turns into a cancer.
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, diseases in
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students
at a smaller age has become
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so
common that every other
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student
is suffering from a serious illness. Since mobile
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phones
have
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, we always forget how harmful they are for mankind.
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Students
in their
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small
age are more prone to such kind of
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radiations
and it could cause severe damage to them. They are the upcoming future of a
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country and
they should not
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into any kind of
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. Mobile
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phones
should
be banned
in the schools across world
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beacuse
of their harmful
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radiations
that they
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emit
despite the fact that they could be useful in
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many
other ways.

We all know that mobile
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phones
contain
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so
much erudite material in them which can
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help
in studying and understanding facts,
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but
the distractions they cause, and the
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radiations
they
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emit
are far more deleterious to a student's health
as well
as learning.
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So
, mobile
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phones
should
be banned
undisputedly
across the world in all the schools.
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IELTS essay Restriction of mobile phones in school positive or negative develpoment?

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